All Comments on 'Under Repair'

You caught the flavor of their feelings after abuse! Meant this one to be a 5...but hit 3 by accident!!!

I really wanted to give this one a 5, but the narrative and plot aren't quite at the level of what I saw in the "Breathe" series. The description of his marriage dissolving was too quick and didn't make sense. I know it may be outside your comfort zone, but look at some of the LW stories by top authors to get a feel on how this part of the story arc should have been done. Strangely, the failure of Elena's marriage was much bit better, highlighting her withdrawal from her family as the abuse grew. (Maybe there are certain topics you're more comfortable with?) I think to fit everything you wanted to do in this story would have been better in 3 parts like "Breathe", but that's just me. Good job! 4*

Loved it!!! Simply realistic!!!

Great build up and I really found myself visualising what was happening. Loved it!

As a horny-making story, about a 3. But as just a plain good story, well-written and entertaining, you get the five.

Great story! Good dialogue, good pace, appreciate ending. Them consummating their relationship the night she offed her ex seems a bit stretched but it’s fantasy. All in all a very enjoyable read.

Another 5 star offering from my newest favorite writer.

Cheers

SAGE

One of the better written stories in this site. Excellent plot. Held my interest all the way through. 5 stars.

Well written

Was the guy in jail for a few days??

Keep writing stories like this.

One hell of a story. I enjoyed the build up even though the ending was predictable. I was disappointed in the very beginning with how his wife just dismissed him while fucking his boss and he just walked out.

Great writing!

Too much violence. A turn off

Well done!

A great story. If I had even a single complaint it would be the fact the brother's ex didn't get any comeuppance (that I saw) but honestly probably something that was unimportant to the story just always nice to see bad people get put in their place like the sister's ex was. 5 star story, very enjoyable.

I THOUGHT IT OUTSTANDING...CINCO ESTRELLAS!

THIS WAS ONE WORTH HOLDING ONTO. I'LL ADD IT TO MY FAVORITES...FIVE STARS!

A good one, even with all the violent acts.

True love? Perhaps. Only a close family bond as foundation can work in some cases.

But, in the long run, it usually spells doom. Got the scars to prove it.

Again, another great story from this author. I just hope the author will continue writing here as his stories are better than most I have read here on Lit. I like the way this story ended but I was kind of disappointed when Dave didn't even put up a fight when caught Sharon cheating on him and let her clean him out except for his hidden account, so much for the 50 50 split. 5/5

WHAT A FUCKING WIMP, DAVE WAS!!!

Good story about a bad thing

Call me a Cro-Magnon red neck with an angry streak

kidnappers, pedophiles, abusers and rapists (different names for same group of humans)

First offense take them out behind the jail and shoot them. Ya cannot cure them, just put them down

Put them in a body bag before killing. We cannot stop the first one but we can stop any repeats

I see where Utah has just charged one of it's state police with child molestation

I volunteer will furnish my own weapon and ammo. You guys will furnish a cold Dr Pepper

Another good story, happy endings are great

5/5

Loved the story! Glad there was some payback for good old Wyatt times three. First from Dave, then his time as jail whore, then with the three shots center mass. The last was maybe a little over kill.... did I just say that? lol. It would be nice if the future held their parents blessing and a couple of little ones running around. That would be a really happy ending. Thanks

Great story realistic and great ending

The story was realistic and about life. In the 2nd part I even got a few tears but the ending was an uplift and happy. As far as Dave's ex, When a hub walks in like that his cock gets broke, especially when his boss is envolved. The writer did not dwell on her at all, a good thing, as she was not the main focus of the story.

For me this was beyond a 5 star and well developed and written. GW

It's cool

He caught them in the middle and just signed everything over? I didn't think I was in the humor section because this was a joke.