All Comments on 'Undone'

Let me be the first to comment: outstanding! Next chapter he’ll either share you with a buddy or have you eating his girlfriend in preparation for his banging her.

Superbly written, outstanding erotica that reveals the beautiful contradictions of power exchange. I sincerely hope you take another trip into this realm.

Superbly written erotica and an outstanding exploration of the beautiful contradictions of power exchange. I sincerely hope you unleash your skills in another visit to this realm.

This is not what I like, yet I liked this - testament to your powerful writing and needy perspective character. I'm so happy for her and her trendy spanish dinner. Thanks for sharing! <3

Wow. Very hot and very well written. Thank you.

This is an absolutely astonishing piece of erotic writing. I am rock-hard and also a little in love with you.

Really enjoyed it, thank you.

How I came upon your stories and why I read this is way beyond my normal zone, but I'm glad I did

Certainly a five. Think I'll read some more.

carvohi

Really enjoyed this story. Her capitulation to being under his control seemed to happen too quickly without much build up, but once she was in his house the action was hot, sexy and full of D/s passion!

Really hot erotic writing, i came across it by luck, good luck. 5* but it deserves 10 compared to many others that i have given 5. I hope this author writes many more.

I need to find a master to train me to be his broken toy❤️

I like the combination of practicality and raw sex. Very nicely done.

This is an incredibly hot story. Raw. Wanton mutual needs fulfilled. Left me achingly hard

HOT More chapters pls.

Another great story that made me really hard!

Exceptional work. Exploring the concept of submission, masochism, and sadism. I can understand the allure. Super short story.

this is plagiarized from “little rabbit” by alyssa songsiridej :(

It can’t be plagiarized because it was published here before “Little Rabbit” came out.

Очень красиво, но где "Контроль разума"?

Liked the single sentence writing style. You understand power exchange. Left me wondering what happens next. Lots of potential. Keep writing.

Brava!

One might ask why she defaulted to using "Sir," but we don't know her background, so it may have been something she'd encountered before the experience.

Lovely writing.

Standing ovation! One of the best BDSM stories I've read. Excellent writing -- I'm going to read more of your stories.