All Comments on 'Unexpected Company'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Could have been better

The writing was okay, though I don't care for present-tense stories; but there was a lot of cutting back and forth between present and past tenses, often within the same sentence. Sort of the reading equivalent of a bumpy road.<p>Pick a tense and stay with it. Not bad for an inaugural effort.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Love it!

I really loved it and I hope you continue to post more stories!!!

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I am in the Army, and I like to write stories every now and then when I am bored. I am always thrilled when they get published and love reading your comments and feedback! Thank you for the supportive critizism, I am always open to suggestions to help me write. For the plain o...

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