All Comments on 'Unexpected Love'

But you need to have someone proofread your story before submitting it. The 3rd paragraph gives the impression that Jenna is a lesbian.

Keep up the good work and get Literotica to put the scoring stars back in. I give this a solid 4 stars!

that paragraph says she is gay,but whamo she is suddenly into a guy that can read more than the box scores.

I liked it, i think in the first bit you wanted to imply that if she was gay she would have the hots for her friend well thats what i took from that. Anyway was a good start, love the characters and can't wait to read more.

It's pushing it to suggest that para 3 implies that Jenna is gay. Surely Jenna was jealous that Haley was getting noticed by the guys and she wasn't.

I think this story has lots of possibilities and I'm looking forward to more.

I'm fairly sure its a typo... I thought that too then figured when it said "hell is Jenna was gay" it was supposed to say "hell IF Jenna was gay"... just figured I'd throw my two cents in here

But I read the whole story thinking that Jenna was gay.

It certainly changes the perspective of the entire story.

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