All Comments on 'Unknown Friends'

A story about people that doesn't belong in any Literotica categories. Maybe in a mystery or police venue.

Don't start fights you can't finish!

5

Neat story, nicely structured, thank you.

Needed a final confrontation with with Carol, but other than that, this was pretty good. Entertaining. I could read another chapter.

Spenser is a fantastic series, I whole heartedly agree.

I loved the the Gray Man's (Rugar) character from the Spenser series.

Good little tale , thanks

Ok, but falls a bit flat at the end

So Carol got off lightly? It would have been nice to hear more about how she cheated on the wrong man and got what she deserved. Still a well written story 4 stars.

Maybe a sequel? Very nice story, 5 Star all the way.

An interesting story about life out there on the streets.

Good short story!

Thought it was a good and interesting read, right up until the writer felt compelled to describe in exhausting detail just what really happened in that fight. Just to make sure we dummies would get it. And yes, he needed to get his butt over to Cindy's and talk to her.

Good but no proper ending per se…

The Gray Man is a character in a book series written by Mark Greaney. The main character is an assassin who works for whoever pays him as well as being a former CIA operative. Netflix produced a movie based on the first book in the series.

Nice story. An enjoyable read.

I liked your story but I think you should have

"fleshed" out his visit to Cindy at the end. Your ending was rather abrupt. Good job!

As I cast a wondering eye on this tale, I found that I couldn’t build up any emotional connection to any of the characters. I didn’t even hate Carol all that much. Lots of cardboard used and then straight to recycling. The author has already demonstrated great capabilities, but not with this particular tale.

Awesome

usual drink, Mr wick?...

Purposely left open for a second part? Good story! 5 stars!

I would have enjoyed if he had visited Cindy.

Gray Man definitely had the right idea about protecting those he cared about although Tommy just happened to be the one he used to cover a good deed. Great story well deserving of th 5 stars

Good read but I would have picked another name other than Gray Man. Not sure if that name has been copyrighted by anyone, but wouldn't be surprised. If you enjoy reading, read the Gray Man series by Mark Greaney. Netflix movie is pretty good as well, but not near as good as the books. 4*

Not a LW story.

Story

Isn't it a shame that you have to warn readers about gunplay? What do they think the most useful tool in expanding this country, in gaining our independence in taming the west in keeping our freedom from foreign intervention was. That is why we have the second amendment. Not the 9th, the 15th or any other lower number but the 2nd guarantee of freedom. Pretty soon you'll have to apologize for eating at Denny's or Olive Garden. Woke is just another word for shameless ignorant coward.

WTF was THAT?

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2 **

'The bar was a simple three sided rectangular thing.' Didn't they used to call them things, triangles? But hey, I feel ya!

How can the bar be 3 sided and rectangular at the same time?

Instead of killing Johnny in private with no witnesses he does it in a bar?

Really liked this story. Big fan of Spencer and thought the "Gray Man" was from the Parker stories. What happened to Carol? She seemed like a character that deserved some retribution. Keep on writing I appreciate your style.

So So, but on the good side. LP

Parker was in a class by himself. I still miss him.

I liked your story. It was short but had some history to it, and a good looking babe for a milf.

Good story. Everyone got what they deserved except for Carol.

This story was okay. I didn’t really get any tension. Given there was the bar fight and the shootings, but the protagonist was an observer and a victim. The post-Alaska explanation was interesting, but again the protagonist played a passive role.

I enjoyed it, the end was a bit "meh" but overall I thought it a decent story.

As for ther gun play, nothing wrong with that, the only times its wrong is when its clearly a writer who sexualizes the things and masturbates to Field and Stream.

Well done. Very original. 5 stars.

The 'Gray Man' is also a Mark Greaney series about a super CIA x-operator with an abundance of skills and +9 lives worth of luck.

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Unless this was a warm-up to a new series, this story leaves me hanging as unfinished with an indecisive ending.

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4.4****, Hooyah, salutes...

I never read Spencer, nor heardcofvtheGrayMan. Your story did nothing for me.

A different revenge story, well done! 5 from me. I wanted more of Cindy, but not necessary to your story - short and sweet.

Thanks for sharing...

I liked the story, however it seemed half hearted to me. You have the beginnings to a grate novel only to dismiss it for this?

Thanks again.

Fantastic story!!!! 👍👏👏

A useful story told in an entertaining way. Nevertheless, I miss a little more "depth" of your protagonists. A little more accessories. 4*!

What? Kinda dumb.

I mean, he started dating and proposed to a slut😭😭😭😭😭.... did he imagine she'd make a perfect wife?😭😭😭😭😭... please stop trying to turn cum guzzling sluts into housewives...I don't understand why he was still dating her after overhearing her with her mom?.... what was he waiting for? The fact that he was still hurt even after being prepared.....baffled me immensely.. he should've of felt nothing but relief.... relief he didn't make the biggest fucking mistake of his life... a divorce would've been more expensive.. is that the woman he aspire to have kids with?🤭😭😭😭.... I'm just really lost... you are suppose to fuck sluts, you don't take them to meet your parents, you damn sure dont ask them to marry you. .. you just fuck them... don't get your feelings involved...just.. he was just boring.. he clearly was letting his dick do all of his thinking for him... this story was a little lame... we didn't hear anything from the slut.. the story was ok... nothing I'd read again

The first word that comes to mind is "inept." This story is inept. Carol was a screaming dumb shit arrogant selfish whore, so how did this guy like her, love her, want to spend the rest of his life with her? You made the MC a stupid shallow clueless bore; inept. And of course Cindy, the virtuous intelligent, deep thinking mother has this brainless whore for a daughter. And I bet you see no inconsistency in that: intelligent virtuous parents have worthless brain dead children all the time. That's what worthless brain dead parents tell themselves to make themselves feel better, and blameless. So what was the plot? Stupid people make bad choices and live fucked up lives? Who doesn't know that? Right; the inept. Thanks for illustrating the point. And thanks for the effort.

Good story. And yeah, I have read all of Parker's books. Damn good.

MC is an idiot. Carol drops the guy she picks up and is immediately with him? She is a fun party girl, not wife material. What

And he should genuinely apologize to CIndy, a real friend and not just because he was scared of the grey man. The ending made him a creep. He knew Cindy was on his side, actually fighting with her daughter over Carol's slutty behavior and there was no reason to be rude to her.

Good read. Could have used some more detail, but I enjoyed it. There's plenty of room and rabbit holes to take things further. Thanks.

Good story but you dropped the ball. He should have gone to Cindys to apologize, then they fucked each other's brains out.

Cindy loves it when a plan comes together. Carol got dumped by the salesman and became a cum dumpster

Fun read

this was a bit dumb

young, dumb, and full of cum huh lol

I liked it a lot. Very different from the usual. Thanks for the read.

Good one! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I still miss Robert Parker. Glad you like him too. There’s hope for us, yet.

One of the best I have read.

Thank You. Keep writing.

2 pages ☹️ This could have been almost a 5 chapter series and I'd've followed it.

Nice story!

@RG69: Spenser (s, not c). And, I agree .... well worth a read!

Yep good read, maybe needs a bit more to the ending, but I like it

OK-ish!

I loved this story.

Thank you for writing it.

Keep them coming.

On page one. I wonder about a three sided rectangle. How does that work? Going back to the story now...

JPB

I liked it. Stands as is but would be interesting to have a prequel or follow up

that needed a bit more to it... and some adopted mother-in-law vibes.

This was great, you could expand it into a cool noir story

Hope

Your still writing if not thanks for the stories todate

Oh and JPB the three side rectangle had seats on three and the bar on the 4th wall. Try and keep up

Great plot. I thought it could have been a bit more robust at the end. Still, very good.

Really fun read! Thanks!

5 stars from Xluckylee again.