All Comments on 'Unlikely Love Pt. 02'

Thanks for the great story, C! Loved it.

absolutely loving this story. Can hardly wait for part 3.

Too short. But I anticipate the next chapter.

Great, more please

Such a sexy story!! Beautifully narrated especially how Tamara desires Elena at the end of the story. My breathing got heavy as I was reading it :)

One pink rose and 5 stars for you.

As some of your other admirers have already suggested, we need to see more of this story! Please continue this series.

Beautifully and elegantly told. Five stars!

Really, very nice. Keep up the great work.

Nicely Done

Anxiously awaiting Chapter 03, the Pottery Class in this lovely romance story.

Yes For 5*-Stars🎉

You are an amazing writing! You have mastered showing vs telling! Your description of things are done so well. I at first I didn’t like the 2 perspectives of the same event but I do enjoy this unique style I have never seen before on this site!! Cannot wait for the rest❤️❤️

Recapping from each perspective I found what has been said in the conversation changes and said differently. Shouldn't the conversation be identical from both perspectives? That's something I don't understand. Other than that this is a great story.

loving this story keep up the story cant wait to see next part

Christa, I agree with annag98's comment, and am indeed grateful to her for having drawn my attention to you and your fabulous writing.

You handle the two perspectives really well. It’s nuanced and sophisticated writing. I’m looking forward to the next chapter.

You more than live up to the promise of the opening chapter. You move us, and the story along at a nice pace, you engage us with the main characters, and you leave at least this reader longing for the moment the dreams become a reality. Five stars from me x

I'm beginning to get anxious, sharing two points of view does establishes each persons thoughts and views of each other that does relishes an intimacy that hasn't come to fruition but is expected to, hopefully very soon.

Sexual dreams in a story are almost *always* a bad idea. It's like letting the sexual cat out of the bag. As a writer, you only have two choices, after you've made that one bad choice: make the dreams as good or better than the real thing, or make them less than the real thing. Neither of those are good story choices. They don't do anything but "fuck up" the real sex scenes later. There's no way to avoid it.

great writing wonderful job

In the opening chapter I noticed that each narrator repeated the same dialog in the same way, using the exact same words. In this one, you keep the main stream but vary the wording in slight ways. I assume that each narrator is reporting her recollection, and it strikes me that this chapter reflects much closely the way recollection works. In fact, I suspect that careful analysis would find different personality traits revealed in the different word choices.

Regardless, I think you are developing the narrative beautifully.

5 stars!

Another great chapter. You're a good writer.

Five stars 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟

Drawing me deeper and deeper into this story with every word, line, and paragraph. Simply romantic, exciting, and waiting on the edge for more.

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

first a 4, this a 5...also getting drawn in...feel sympathy for Tamara, esp after her admission about her pottery

Building the story so beautifully, and as one of the other commenter said, feeling for Tamarra, trapped in an abusive marriage...

So well written, a pleasure to read!