All Comments on 'Valentina'

by JakeRivers

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AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
sweet, seems realisitc

dunno much about boats, but it seems realistic, and the romance is sweet enough, and took about the right amount of time.

saw_man1saw_man1over 18 years ago
Wonderful

You sure fooled me. When I read that he was an ex Ranger I was certain that there would be some sort of shoot out. What I found instead is a wonderful story of second chances and love and right winning out. Great story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
It's up to your usual

DJ:

When I see your name on a story I am bound to read it. You've never let me down and this story is no exception. Well constructed and well told. Thank You. Ronnie W.

DG HearDG Hearover 18 years ago
Another Good One Jack

Now it's always expected of you Jack, and you always deliver. Very good story. I like the song also haha.

with respect

DG Hear

Blue88Blue88over 18 years ago
Nice job

Good work, Jack. Nice to read a sweet, beautifully told story with a happy ending. Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Very Romantic DJ.

You old softie. I loved it, especially naming the baby Valentina.

PAPATOADPAPATOADover 18 years ago
Very well done.

Believe it or not I read this while my Freddy Fender CD was playing on the computer. Loved the way you incorporated the travel log into the story. Thank you for a good story and I will look forward to more of the same.

peggytwittypeggytwittyover 18 years ago
Another good story

You never let anyone down with your stories.

Please keep writing!

My Erotic TrailMy Erotic Trailover 18 years ago
Harlingen

I grew up some in Port Mansfield / padre island and port isabella so your story hit home, ain't that right Houston <grin> a very good story Jack and thanks for the comment on my poem the other day. I was running through the storys and recognized the name <grin and damn sure glad I did...Art~

Nightowl22Nightowl22over 18 years ago
Thoroughly enjoyable Story

A very good writing. Course you lost me with all the town names but it didn't seem that I had to know. This is a very romantic story. Also, it flows well and the relationship is slowly developed. Just as I feel a relationship should be built.

Loved your description of her breasts; especially since I knew two just like that--fantastic.

Always enjoy your writing.

NamizujsNamizujsover 18 years ago
Thank You for an other one!

DJ, I am always glad to see a story with Dynamite Jack as the author, I know I have a good read ahead of me!

Thanks and keep them coming please!

John

Declan CravensDeclan Cravensabout 18 years ago
You continue to amaze me!

Thank you so much for giving such descriptive, detail-oriented tales! You give the reader such reality and make your characters become real, live people in our minds! Again, I bow to your excellence!

Declan

TavadelphinTavadelphinover 10 years ago
OK I am going to make a not completely positive comment -

OH NO??!!

LOL -

There are almost 2 complete stories here - the Kevin and Teri love story and the Ranger Kevin story - there was so much about Kevin in his early life and career it could easily be it's own complete story - or chapter 1 of this one -

Then the stry of them meeting and him helping her escape and the developing love - it has plenty for a complete story or at least chapter 2 -

That having been said I loved the characters and the story ran so true and believable - like so much of what you write -

I just wish there were more from you - I hope you are well!!

Bo47Bo47over 7 years ago
a nice story

Nice and gentle break from all the hard edged non-con and loving-wives btb storie on this site. At times it seemed a conversation with a new friend over a couple of bottles of Lone Star.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
Nice Story

I enjoyed reading it. I have thought often of moving to the coast, maybe down towards South Padre. Maybe Port Isabel, I really like that little town. Just one note, though, geographically speaking, Monterrey is not a port city, it is nearly two hundred

miles inland. I do realize the story is fiction but a modicum of reality goes a long way toward making a story feel more believable. I still give it 5 Stars.

RD35RD35over 2 years ago

Just a nit pick re the boat. A Cabo that size would almost necessarily be diesel. Your reference to"gassing up" got my attention. Good story.

RD35

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