by Comixgrl
Great erotica, keep writing. The build up with the romantic foreplay and then how the story takes a turn into really hot and primal sex....wow!
Such a fun little piece of writing. Loved how surprised the guy was and how bold his girlfriend was. The anal play was an added bonus. Cudos to you!
Sorry, a little bit of anal sex goes a long way with me. Your story was just too much anal for me. An anus is not a sexual organ, never was, never will be. If you want to write stories about normal sex, I'll be glad to read them.
I just can't get past the licking of things after they've been in someone's ass. Yuck! Not to mention dangerous from a health perspective (guess you've never had a salmonella or e-choli infection, not sexy!)
This is very well written in my opinion. The prose is a lot better than some of the junk you read on the Internet. I like the descriptive text and it is very hot and sexy. Great job.