All Comments on 'Valentine's Day Story'

Great story, terrific revenge. Love it. AAAAA+++++

Great story - never upset a chef

Its great having you writing again DG! Loved the story- thank you. 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

This short piece is not one of your memorable contributions — other than the male protagonist characters wooden, poorly developed, lacks erotica, storyline rather juvenile and despite happy ending not romantic.

He does Cheri the slut bare back yet uses a condom with sara, his true love?

Thank you for reading my story. It was fun writing it

With respect

DG Hear

Good story. Good Ending.

Too derivative...

Excellent story. 5 stars.

What a great revenge. That was a fun read. Thanks

Don't mess with the cook!

5

So nice to seeing you writing again.

Infantile.

Usually I admire your writing, but while the story was good the writing was very monochromatic, flat and passionless

I agree with Migbird. I usually love your stuff, but this entry was kind of weak.

Solidly written good characters! It didn’t have a lot of emotion but was good. Worth the time to read.

Thank you for posting.

If you keep writing I will definitely keep reading!

If sara was his friend and liked him why date jerks that made fun ofhim

One of my favorite authors

Please keep writing

5 Stars for this crappy, little tail.

Although I'm unaware of any word-limitations or conditions put forward for the "Valentine's Day Erotic Story Contest", but the story was a bit fast-paced for my interests. Writing could have had more luster, as well as more "lust"---because it wasn't erotic at all. 4 stars for the plot though.

good story.

I am reading all your writings, and this one changes a lot compared to your previous stories.

You very often have the habit of making the guy a serial fucker and the best lover in the world, and the girl an almost holy virgin with no experience.

Here, there are only 2 young adults who love and find each other.

There is no guy in heat, no super lover, no holy slut, in short, real realism.

Sara and Henry look a lot like real people, seem a lot more authentic.

And it's refreshing.

Sara is a very weak link and a total disappointment in this story. She prefers to give in to the threats from the other cheerleaders than stick with her real friend. That sure is VERY promising attitude for a solid relationship in her own family in the future!!!

Henry isn't much better; thank God he has a dick to think for him, first with Cheri and then with Sara. The two main characters are VERY weak and the main feature is the rush of shitting patients all coming to the hospital at the same time. Thank God there are lots of loose end in this story and there is no epilogue to stretch it even more.

3*

BJ

Great Story.. Loved it!!

Glad they ended up together, but I was still disappointed with Sarah's behavior. Being with the jocks in order to stay a cheerleader was really no excuse.

He cummed in Cheri but wore rubber for Sara?!?