All Comments on 'Valerie Ch. 05'

Please tell me what you thnk of my stories. I especially want to hear any critisms you might have. I'm interested in both comments of the writing and on the story, especially the sex scenes. Those critisms will help me improve my writing. Thanks for reading my stories.

dont let francine kill herself

This story is wonderful!!! I agree with the comment about not letting Francine kill herself. You are a VERY talented writer and I look forward to reading many more of your stories!

i read the whole story from start to finish today i loved it...please continue it to atleast another chapter.

I would love to read more. I hoping for a happy ending.

Again, the pts given were for excellent writing ability. IMO, too much girl on girl (I'm straight, so G-on-G bores me). I wish there could be more than one label in these situatiuons. I would label this story BSDM and Lesbian. In fact, I thought there were too many acts of submission required in the time aloted in Valerie's initiation. It was overwhelming for me. There were still boundry issues. Valerie doesn't have any or ....the few she has.....she breaks. I think she's losing herself. Is that what this lifestyle is about?

Again a very good story. The characters are starting to flesh out. I enjoy the little insights into their thinking. xantu

Thanks for an engrossing read!