All Comments on 'Varna Ch. 09'

Great story, great pacing. Loving it.

This is becoming truly excellent, keep up the good work :)

Wonderful chapter, can't wait for more. Just wondering, is there a map of Varna available (more detailed than the generic Map of Leinyere)? I'm especially curious about the relative location of Albo's home base, Souglad, and Elmina.

Another wonderful chapter

Well, THAT's a cliff hanger...

🖤🖤🖤🖤🖤🖤🖤🖤 moooorrrreeeee!!!! Feed me moooorrrreeeee!

Thank you once again. This is really marvelous storytelling.

and another standing ovation.

Thanks for taking us all along.

Great chapter, it looks like this story just got a lot longer, now that Tauma, and company have had to escape the castle.

I knew Merik was going to stir up a little trouble, but I did not expect him to commit patricide.

I hope Nathal gets what’s coming to him.

Now I see why the Duke didn’t name Aludar the heir. What a coward, to sneak out of the castle and leave his four year old daughter. You have my permission to have something rather grisly happen to him.

And poor Toran talk about a lamb to the wolves, I do not predict a good future that kid

Keep up the good work, Thank you for keeping us entertained. KS

Just wondering, was Gerder Tanle inspired by the Empress Matilda, and her conflict with the usurper, Stephen?

An epic tale, so well told. Five humongous stars.

I'm beginning to think this story my become even better than Westrons, which is the benchmark I now use when evaluating the quality of any story. Why are you not a professional author, or are you?

I'll confess that my last impression is my first one here: I understand the fey are magical beings that can be helpful to a point, but it's unclear to me how much. I hope you will explain that in ch 10 or why it's so special--given Gerdar Tanle is over the moon with the prospect.

I'm also interested to see how you expand Rhigen's "consternation" at Tauma batting that rock 15 feet. Certainly I thought he needed to use his magic, but your story detailed he was already drained from using it to sharpen his mind, so I get that. I'm glad he's back and I'm interested to see how much he makes Tauma and Glasha practice.

BOY. Alissara came RIGHT in the nick of time, right about when I thought Tauma and company were goners! You timed that well, so great execution. I appreciated Durgat's "Peneda will have to change his name now...to Peneda of 94 horse!!" That was quite funny. Very orderly retreat, to escape from Merik--AND to get all the orcish warriors with him; the fact they chose Tauma (as did some of the stablehands) was a very touching point of the story.

I really can't wait to see what else you have planned for this, as it's very riveting indeed. 5

How about having a "wit" contest between Sezima and Durgat? Since both are so original in their remarks (Sezima: "ye gods...we shall not lack for shade!!" and Durgat: "Now he has to call himself Peneda of the 94 horse"), it would be really cute (and funny) if you could manage to craft some exchanges between them. I'm certain Durgat noticed Sezima brought 10 calvary men, so with Sezima being Tauma's best friend, I imagine him bringing those men impressed Durgat.

God damn you, sir. I'm running out of superlatives.

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wonderful story, looking forward to following chapters 5 stars

It's 5:48 in the morning... And i havent gotten a lick of sleep... Damn you...

-jaye-