All Comments on 'Vatican City Ch. 01'

RedDrake, I am an atheist but I believe in accepting that everyone has their own beliefs and hope they will accept mine. Having said that, this story was stunning, its simple power coming directly from belief. Thanks for giving it to us.

I was I interested in this story until you beat it to death with the same sentence...my lips pressed. My lips pressed hard. His lips pressed. It ruins the story for me. You need to edit and find other ways to show how the characters feel.

the story is beautiful and have the potential

But plz dont write Many times "Some"

U write iT Many times this word

Spoilt for me by all the religious fantasy that overwhelmed the story at the end.