All Comments on 'Voodoo Mama'

Unattributed quotes and arbitrary paragraph breaks make the dialog untrackable.

Tons of the Dialogue in this story is out of place. The names get mixed up a lot, where something said by the mother would be ended with “Wynter said” and vise versa, it’s super confusing. There is also some lines where the gender of who is speaking is flipped between the husband and wife.

although the structure of this story is difficult to follow i did enjoy it once i pieced it together... some nice topics flowing through....