All Comments on 'Waiting Ch. 02'

So great that there‘s another installment. I love your writing and this series, thanks!

5 stars of awesome writing and sexual adventure. Outstanding writing and character development and great story telling, Rock on this entertaining couple and let them explore sexual fun. Cheers

Next installment!!!!!!

Awesome! Love the character development and the hot sex. More please!

Thank you.

The growth which you've demonstrated in your writing is really impressive.

With regards to overall quality, this is on a different planet to Little Packages, which was boring and teeming with errors and terrible dialogue.

Now, there's a snap and style to your dialogue which really helps bring your characters to life. It's really pleasing to see how decisive you've become in building the world for them to inhabit.

As for the future, the biggest area to develop will be the chemistry between the characters, but it's not completely absent here. You've found a way to make brevity work for you which keeps the story and narration nice and sharp. But the heavy lifting is done by your female characters, while your male characters still struggle to be anything more than one-dimensional placeholders.

Again, you need the help of an editor, or at least a copy editor, to get your document ready for publishing. It's Tinder, not Tindr. Your author's note is included within the body of the manuscript. I could go on. Publishing your story without even checking for errors tells the audience that you don't care, and I suspect that you care very much.

To improve so quickly in a relatively short time is really impressive and reflects the hard work which you've clearly put in.

Great story thus far and maybe tone down the BDSM shit....why didn't she tell the MC about Rachel...soon she'll be stalking her to pass imfo to the soon to be ex

This is so good. The writing, the characterization, the flow and of course the erotica. Looking forward to the next installment.

Can't wait for the next chapters, so excited you've announced there will be more!!

Damnit, i hate it when a story grabs me so hard that i wanna keep reading and the next chapter isn't there yet... (hint, hint😉)

Great story, 5stars

Damn. My gut tells me it's going to be one hell of a series in a long run

Bring on chapter 3!

Cheers

SAGE

Re the long Anon, I don't think she/ he knows how difficult it is to even get a beta-reader, let alone an editor. I know I have tried often enough. Keep up the good work and I admire your ability to handle dual POVs as I can only cope with writing 1st person single POV.

Oh and another plea for future chapters, but I have your back catalogue and my own writing to fill more time than I have available!

It appears Seth has a tiger by the tail, and Samantha has Seth by the cock. Don't know where this is headed, but it's on the fast track to great sex. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

Can you pleaaaaase post the next chapter? I've re-read it so many times, and am still keen for more.

Love it, more please!

Hurry up on Part 3!

Most Intriguing so far. Please continue with the story - 5 stars