All Comments on 'Walter and Celia'

Your prior stories had some realistic characters. The ones in this story are just one-dimensional and unbelievable. Wife loves hubby, yet jumps in bed with another with no plan to end it? Then hubby just accepts her cheating with no plan to deal with it? We really have no real to care about either one.

For once, a story where the guy's dick doesn't get hard when he sees his wife with another man.

reminds me of an ex girlfriend of mine. good riddance.

Very real i see it happening every day it could be either one who comes up with the excuse to cheat. Men win 7 out of every 10 custody battles i wonder why.

As a walter, myself - I find such stories very sad, while being held closely to the narrative. What is not made enough of is how much these stories in some cases belong in a non-erotic category for much of the readership. Of course in that case I read less than 20% of the non-erotic listing.

Perhaps our society need to make it more difficult to marry (recognizing the act of conceiving and birthing be more of a community, city, state and national concern). Shift the choice to responsible adults, churches and focused community organizations.

Feels like a synopsis rather than the finished piece.

I have read the same story in a few other articles. This one is shallow in comparison to others. "Dig Two Graves" is a better example of the wife-believes-the-lover-instead-of-husband storyline.

is always over the top and it always trumps stupidity. TK U MLJ LV NV

Why would the husband allow the man in his house? I understand that he did not care. There is a difference between not caring and being shit on in your own house. You know, the one you pay for. That was a big finger poke in the chest.

Good revenge story.

This is the 6th writers and stories where somebody does prank with infidelity. Is this a sport in the States?

These Revenge stories usually are more violent or everyone complains that hubby is a wimp. What happened to the ant-wimp squad today?

She just went out and started screwing Charlie because Charlie SAID Walter was having an affair? There was no check to see if it was true, or a confrontation with her husband? The woman seemed to be looking for an excuse to cheat.

the husband did the right thing, except the coming to my house part. Also she would have moved or I would have burnt the house down.....lol

....it could have been lifted from 1000 other stories.

What lawyer would push a divorce for adultery without any proof? Most judges are going to get pissed at you for wasting their time. Walter told her he wasn't screwing around and Celia doesn't start pushing Charlie for proof? Then after it's all over she thinks that she can just say I made a mistake and all will be well? I'm glad Walter wasn't a wimp but Celia is painfully stupid. As to taking action against the guy in his house, what does he do? His wife invited the guy in. The guy is an ass and will never leave voluntarily. Any physical action Walter takes will end up getting him arrested. You could call the cops and they would probably ask Charlie to leave but they couldn't force him to. There is no win for Walter. Of course, I would have found some way to beat the shit out of Charlie at some point when I was sure I could get away with it. Muggings happen all the time. He did force Charlie's divorce and financial ruin so that was some payback. <br><br>

Maybe some of the problem with the story is that Walter is very even tempered about things. I actually identify with him. If my wife did what Celia did I would have hated her but then cut her out of my feelings and arranged to blow her off. No muss, no fuss. A boring response for a story however.

well done cut and dry story. Why fight over the wife? She cheated and the author had the hubby make up his mind and follow thru.

thanks for the nice tale

A fast paced story,straight to the point and no fooling around.

I liked it and the story held my interest through out.

What happen your stories have always been good or a great read to me. This story was very weak. Maybe I read to much. Thanks for sharing maybe the next one will be my kind of story.

As said before, no lawyer would risk his reputation without proof. Also, a 7" cock is above average...average being AVERAGE. The sex was ok but if I were him, I woulda fucked her for one or two weeks after the divorce then dumped her ass.

Men with Balls! Love these stories

Felt rushed. 3stars.

I don't believe there was any love in this marriage. So, the story lacked emotions and the tension of this genre.

Not your best!

3*

Nice gentle pace with great irony. Very enjoyable. You are a very clever wordsmith. Thank you.

Your writing is getting better. The crowd that reads these stories hate wimps. Sooner or later Harry in VA will attack you so don't give a shit he has 60IQ, dumber that old dog shit. So man up your male characters and continue. You will do well.

Keep writing you rate a 3.8, so keep it up, just tighten your story line and get rid of the wimps.

Keep writing.......................

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brings results and revelations. TK U MLJ LV NV

There is no depth.

There is no character development.

There is no meaningful dialog.

Other than that a great story.

I enjoyed it. Good job.

just to point out a couple of the logical inconsistencies of this 'story' -

what lawyer would go into court using the word of an adulterer as the only proof in his claim of adultery against the husband?

how likely is it that he would be standing outside the department store at just the time his ex-wife was being charged with shoplifting?

The ex-wife got fat after the divorce; then she is caught shoplifting; why not give her cancer and warts? Don't hold back on your punishment .

btw: if Duna and huedogg are in your corner, rest assured your story is a worthless piece of shit.

Just sayin'

huecuck is a self-described cuckold and although he admits to liking Matt Moreau he, like all beaten cuckolds, rates stories solely based on depravity of the revenge. duna is a mental case so it becomes problematic judging any story based on his comments so best just not to read them.

he swallowed hot jizz, cornhole took a buggering, betrayed!

A story with no wimp!

All the other stories this writer has spewed forth dictates that this story is also worth only 1*.

we see a pussy ass anoncuck following me around like a stalker. Go away little doggie and dig up you bone or boner. Which ever works for you.

Thanks for the offering. Not sure the legal stuff is realistic, but I see you point was the revenge rather than striving for accuracy.

After reading a story (Tom,Dick and Harri) of a wimp that this writer posted today, I wanted to see if all his stories were like that. This one having one of the highest scores, I read it, and almost fell out of my chair. A story without a wimp. Actually he gave this husband a pair of balls. From reading the comments, I didn't think this writer could write stories without wimp humiliating cuckold husbands. I guess I was wrong. Maybe it's just this one, from the looks of the scores on some others. Oh, well there is hope. (ML)

But no way a man gets that fair a hearing in divorce court.

But the wife seemed really dumb to me. I do enjoy a good BTB story but in this case his wife was such an idiot I couldn't get all that steamed up about her cheating. The whole thing just seemed to lay there on the page. It didn't create any emotion.

This author has done much better.

Sweetie cannot be this unconscious and still have attracted (and kept content) a man like Hubby! Even after having the paucity of her accusation explained to her, she perseverates in believing it! And, she has a lawyer! Maybe it is her twin sister? Nope, Sis wouldn't have gone past junior high, either! Certainly Sweetie should be able to get the fee back from the (totally inept) legal beagle!

Listening with your cunt.

That is a good line.

and have nothing to stay on top, must learn humility and ennui. TK U MLJ LV NV

there is nothing here to see

And I quote from the next to last paragraph - "That was the last I ever heard from Celia....She called me a few times after that.....". This is but one example of the poor writing this author offers in his stories. He didn't hear from her but in the same paragraph she called him several times? I sorry but that kind of stupidity just does nothing for me. No stars.

I never commented. well I enjoyed it. I like a good thin plot line every now and then. It's a comfortable break by a really good writer.

Not much emotion in this but at least this time the husband had some balls and didn't let his whore of a wife run all over him. Better than most of your stories.

not bad for murphy... still, I don't much like stories about brain-dead wives...

One thing I always stand by is that cheaters are the most stupid people alive. The idiot cunt here is proof positive. This tale was interesting in a stupid way.

Duh

You can over look a lot in a spouse for love. Unfortunately, poor moral character, poor judgement brought on by poor childhood training, and low intelligence is a deal breaker. She must have been beautiful, because she didn't have anything else going for her. Besides the emotional aspects of marriage, the real reasons to be married are mutual support and to create a nest for your offspring. There was no mutual support in this case, and she would have made a terrible mother. Good Riddance.

A fun read.

Nice little flash story about a stupid woman. Burn the bridge, suffer the consequences. Sorry no do overs for being stupid.

She got what she deserved...shit happens!

I don't have any interest or sympathy for either of them because neither is real.

and not the one of his namesake, TK U MLJ LV NV

He does nothing to Charlie???? What the fuck kind of wimp are you anyway????

The more I read your stories the more disgusted I get!

You are one pathetic author, if you dare call yourself one!

Great Story, Enjoyed reading! Thanks

Good story of another stupid slut.I agree with other comments. He should have gotten a little revenge on Charlie. On second thought, maybe he did. He gave him Celia.

She believes someone trying to fuck her but the husband she doesn't believe? That has no basis in reality. Someone that stupid would have to be reminded to breath or they'd die of suffocation.

A woman is the life support system for a cunt.

I really enjoyed this one and I believe that could be a good btb story

Wish I could give you 4.5 stars. Its better than 4, but not quite a 5. Good job.

A great little short story. Never listen to Charlie.

...predictable and utterly commonplace. In short, not entertaining. One star.

Great little story. Burned Celia and Charlie with one match. What a dumb woman.

Punishment? Enough I guess

But I am a fan of the extreme pain punishment

Believe it or not the same thing happened to Me ..

He was in an alleyway bin surfing for a meal when I came upon him.

By the time I finished with him he was a mess.

The really sad thing is he was so drunk from the cheap booze he had been drinking that he could not remember who had done it to him. Even though I told him several times he just could not function right.

When his ex-wife was informed she went to the hospital to see him and spat on him saying "She wished she could meet the person who did that to him so she could buy him a beer."

She rang me the next night offering to but me a beer if I gave her a blow by blow description.

We met and I told her what I had done and she thanked me

Better than most of Murphy's stories. The husband didn't wimp out.

Granted it was literally a retread of many other stories with this theme.

But this got me

"I have a video clip on my cell phone showing the both of them fucking."

"Does she have any proof on you?"

"How can she? It never happened."

"Can you get more proof of her cheating/'

"Sure, if they do it in the house again."

One video of them fucking is generally all the proof one needs. If you needed to have a cheating sex scene to piss off the reader you should have had that frst video not be clear enough or some such thing, other than that this wasnt needed.

This is pretty funny, though I suspect some of that may be unintentional.

There are some dumb ones out there.

We might as well just write one story and put all of these different “authors” names on it. Get it all out-of-the-way at once. There’s just nothing interesting about the story.

I hate to say it, but that level of stupid almost makes me feel sorry for her. Almost. However, stupid does not justify a lack of character.

Good story

If Celia is really that stupid, and as written, she is abysmally stupid, how moronic is good ol’ Walter for finding her worth marrying? What did he expect? The guy is a tool, a passive, nasty little sonovabitch.

Writing a battle of wits story featuring a mean bastard vs. someone as dumb as a bag of hammers just isn’t that fascinating. It seems to me that anyone that finds something this one-sided and pathetic remotely interesting might also enjoy drowning kittens or shooting puppies. I mean, seriously, this is just overkill.

@Ruttweiler is the whiniest, bitchiest, most critical commenter on this site, but he's typical of the "dollar mouth and nickel ass" crowd. They bitch about a FREE (i.e. $0.00) erotica site, but they won't try to write anything "perfect" to show the actual contributors HOW it's done. Imagine being that angry and that dissolute that you get so worked up over FREE smut! Look at the posts, below. Twice in 10 months he reads this story and complains. Now... 'complains' is too mild of a word. He whines about it. Seriously, his avatar needs the be the other end of the dog.

This is very common among women. They will believe the waitress at ihop before they believe their husband