All Comments on 'Wamleck's Conqueror'

I like where this story is heading. You gave it a good start by introducing the characters and moving the story along. You have a lot of possibilities to write and where to head this story. It seems like you will be a writer that makes the story come first and then include the sex. Keep up the good work and thanks for your time and efforts with this story.

An interesting and well crafted start with a believable plot. I liked the way that you develop each character. There are some irritating minor mistakes that could be avoided through careful proofreading and use of an editor. I look forward to the next episode. Please keep up the good work.

What relation is Naria to Harper?

The story said that Harper is a soldier, and implied that Jack was too.

So why is Harper, a soldier, wearing a pink dress and a tiara?

I will be sure to use an editor next time! I’m just now seeing all the mistakes I did!