by yeswecanlit
What are the character traits? Good base story, but there is nothing to endear me to the characters.
There's no story here. And you tell us to enjoy? what's to enjoy? There needs to be character building along with a story, there was none of that here.
More a flash than a story (hence the reaction from our anonymous friends) but a great start. Nice mood, and you can spell!!! Paras a little long and can be hard to work through for the reader. Just look at that...
Please bring more.
Lots of possibilities, needs character development,and development of romance angle, however it is your story, what you have is a good read. Thanks for sharing.
NorthPacific