All Comments on 'Watched as I Masturbated'

Two things come to mind. First is dictionary and editor and the second is this needs to be much longer with more descriptions of surroundings, the girls and many other things.

Liked the thought process though and what the possibilities could be in the future.

"I love the smooth feeling and it enhances the feelings."

A thesaurus might prove helpful too.

Jesus Does anybody proof read any of these stories on this site of all the sites I've been to and read stories on this one has the worst buildup in storytelling the worst comprehension of the English language and all in all is just a poor excuse for writers. After the story sound like a six-year-old made it up if you want real stories go to The Kristen Archives