by The Style Guy
Needs continued. How old is Susan? Perhaps she is young enough to start a baby with, if she comes out with the two of you the next night?
I did notice one or two grammatical errors or word omissions, like when he has his first orgasm, but otherwise that was great! And I'm from Indy so I know those places! Good job!
As with your other stories, your sexual themes are hot, but your misogynistic attitude towards women makes them very pedestrian and cliche'.
It's your story. The writing was passable but could have been better if you cared enough about your readers to proof it and correct it before submitting it. The attitude toward the woman turned me off completely. Too bad one of them doesn't treat you the same way.
This fantasy story needs to culminate with a baby in her belly from you.
...fine with this one until the "11-inch" cock routine. So cliche! Your Babysitter story was far more realistic, believable and far better written.
I chose to read this one because I'm a Hoosier and was amused that someone would pick Indy for a setting.
But keep writing. We all have to grow over time!
Just finished rereading all your stories. Several hours of good entertainment.
Thank you,
tom anon
Every story you write about wives ends before the aftermath and the revenge the wronged men take on you. You have a personal reservation at every Emergency Room in America and every A & R on the Continent... The UK just wants to let you die. and that's okay with most of us.
Hopefully her husband wakes up and divorces her slutty cheating ass and takes her asshole lover down in the process.
1* for this POS.
But I looked at your other stories and finally figured why all your stories seem to get 4 stars plus. You're like Imstillfun - beloved by Literotica and Laurel and therefore you NEVER get a bad score. This story didn't deserve 4 stars. But hey - you can't win every time.
And "...my thick eleven-inch cock...", the stories don't get much worse than this. Signed: BTW
Every time I come across one of his earlier stories, I am amazed at how this author has improved his writing. He is one of my favorites now and I look forward to every story.
about the mythical powers of a giant cock...SG, grow the fuck up.
You go BTB on a cheating wife in one story.....then you write this kind of shit story? It seems you are confused and maybe need some therapy?
"The outline of my thick eleven-inch cock was clearly visible as it extended along my left thigh." - Okay, I see we've left the realm of reality.
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Pretty awful. You've definitely improved since you wrote this.
You should make a story starting with 10 inch cock that becomes 11 inch on the second page and then 12 on the third page. It would be mildly entertaining. This one isn't.
I cannot believe the style guy wrote this story . His Stories are usually much better then this one .
I don't know if this is the same Chris as in the previous 2 stories. If so, then I'm in wonder at his capacity to control the size of his cock. In the first story he is 10 inches, 8 inches in the 2nd story and 11 inches here. An interesting story comes to mind. An extremely lazy man was given a magical gift by a genie. Every time he whistled his cock would grow longer and every time he clapped his hands it would become shorter. So he found himself a sexy woman interested in big cocks. When he inserted his dick in her, she was hardly impressed. "Is that all you have"? she asked. "You want more, baby?" he asked. Then he whistled and his cock grew 2 inches more. "Is that all?" she asked. So he whistled again. This went on till his cock stood at 12 inches!!! "Yeah, this is fine," she said. So the lazy guy just lay there with his cock deep in her. "What now? Aren't you going to fuck me?" she asks. "Oh, you want to fuck, do you?" said the lazy man,"Here it comes. " Clap-whistle, clap-whistle, clap-whistle, clap-whistle..........