by lustfuldesires
The beginning is not bad. The ending reads like a someone who wanted to finish the story real quickly because he had an editor's deadline to meet. Let's be more cruel and say that the ending sounds like the end of a bad fairy tale.
A great beginning, but needs MUCH more content for the last four paragraphs - could have been spun out over a couple of pages. How about putting the missing stuff in Chapter 2 where they describe in detail to each other, and maybe try some of their newly learned tricks?