by TamLin01
not much loving going on here. maybe you should have saved it for the halloween contest.
I agree with other anon. An okay story, but glossing over how they got together and what she did on the hunt, you cut out the most interesting parts without making everything else interesting enough to forgive that. I liked the ending. The only thing summer about this were the months. I have to give it a three, but for the Halloween contest it would have gotten a 4. It didn't feel like a lot of effort was put into this one.
I really enjoyed the character of the heroine in your story. The sex was good but more interesting was Laren as a "person": how she saw the world and her relationship with Randy/boy toy/prey (all of the above - lol)
My favourite story of this contest so far. 🙂🙃