All Comments on 'What This Seems'

by PrincessPumpkinhead

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Needs more

I like the story line, and your too brief when describing them making love. I read it twice and hope that you go back and flesh it out a bit.

ramonbrookramonbrookover 8 years ago
Have to agree with the previous Anon

Not enough detail in the love making.

Also, It seems like Sophie really isn't in love with lance as much as he is with her! He is just a diversion from messed up husband.

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