by NikkiD268
Your story flowed really well did not seemed rushed at all. I like the build up to something more in the next chapter. Hopefully you just do not jump in to sex and turn her slutty to soon. I look forward to reading your next chapter thank you for writing it.
Please continue. Thanks for sharing. The only critique I could come up with is that you may have wanted to use protagonist not antagonist....though I haven't read the Hunch Back of Notre Dame in ages so I could very well be wrong.
I loved it. I want more. Soon! You made me like Phillip. A lot. You really built the characters. I can't wait. :)
Well written, but at this point it is too similar to Fifty Shades of Grey. Try to make it more your own.
I am intrigued and that makes me want to continue reading more of your story.
An intriguing start to a series. Just do us all one favor and continue it to the end. To many good starts just fade away....
Hey, super good start! Would love to read more from you!
I'm eager to see where this story leads. Good character development and build up in the first chapter.