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D5834: Mr. Mister 'Broken Wings'? The lyrics do fit for Blaze and Jie Er. However, I don't think it quite matches my imagination of Vida's Lullaby. But hey, that's ok :).
ViktorReeds: Thank you for your sweet comment. WhiteWalls? Could you send me a link? I wish to know who you are comparing to :). The next arc is the demonic arc, so they will appear quite soon.
Anonymous (I will truly miss you): Oi, don't kill me off so soon. Haha. When I first started, I didn't care enough to improve my grammar, but that has changed. I hope you've noticed the difference, and I am glad you kept going until you began to appreciate the story. I am sorry for making it seem as if I've left without notice. I did leave a note on my profile, but I guess most people missed it.
I hope this chapter was worth the time I made you wait. I hope my stories will continue providing you a safe haven from whatever it is that you are going through. Your words may sound cheesy to others but they really do make me glad. Knowing that my writing has given solace to someone is more than I could ask for :).
RanceSama: You finally came back?! I was thinking that you messed around with Momo too much and got your 'head' bitten off. Glad you are back, though, as sober as you could possibly be. This dragon needs his chapterly dose of madness.
Fiora and Alice: They may have to take a break for a little while, but they are not gone from the story :P.
Which mother did Blaze think was the better cook?
Maybe he was talking about his Earthly mother...
Why didn't Momo think of it?
Because she is a pure soul. Even you can't corrupt her pure carnike brain.
Do you know what this space dragon calls an angel threesome?
A Triangle!
Jeffery -- be careful around that one -- she may turn out to be more than you bargained for. Jefferey will be back in some future chapter for sure :).
Also, Jefferey isn't dead. How did she get to Earth? Did you finally make your way to Azra-El through Momo's help? Oh, how I rue this day! Those poor, poor, angels and demons. Well, now I am glad that Jefferey is around...
Vici, Vidi, Veni - CD
Anonymous (Love-hate Relationship): Love Hate Relationship
Hey Anon! Thank you for sharing your opinion, and I am glad you still love the story despite not liking the fact that I never reveal much about Blaze's past.
I must confess that I do regret not exploring more of Blaze's past life in the initial chapters of the story. It was partly intentional, and partly because this was just a wish fulfilment wet dream until around chapter 7. Then I realized the story's potential and began to focus on the details.
By then, however, I was too deep to suddenly begin exploring other aspects of his previous life. I will still do it, obviously, but it will be very slow compared to the rest of the story. Maybe, I will change that in the re-write (if/when I get to it).
Anyway, I would like to raise some points or questions or whatever you may call them, in response to your own. Just for the sake of discussion.
1. Firstly, I wanted to let you know that there has always been a 'story' behind Blaze's reincarnation. It's a part of the larger story. Me not completely revealing it is partly because of it 😊.
2. If you love the idea of being transferred to another world, why do you want to read about MCs struggling or wishing to come back to their own? (Just curious)
3. I do mention that Blaze was raised in a stable and moderately well to do family. He is also quite attached to his friends. So, I am sure he misses his friends and family from his previous life. I realize that I do not raise this issue very much, but I would think it can be assumed. I will try to add more of his emotions in the rewrite.
4. Blaze has always been an adaptable and easy-going person, despite his occasional emotional outbursts.
Now, he was reincarnated or transported to an entirely different world without any memories of how he got there or why he was sent there. Currently he thinks his existence in Azra-El is a freak accident of nature -- Elyssa initially considered the possibility of false memories -- a brain can do that when it can't make sense of a large amount of information. Blaze is not even sure if Azra-El is in the same universe. I mentioned that he started his bachelor's in the sciences (Physics/Math) -- he knows enough to realize that traveling to a potentially different universe is next to impossible -- unless there is a 'magical wormhole' somewhere -- there has been no indication of this, yet. Also, is he in the same time period? It is quite possible that he has been 'reincarnated' years into the future. Then, none of the people he knows will still be alive on Earth. If so, is there a point in going back? Can his new body survive in Earth's environment? Maybe, it can't live without energy.
In any case, my point is that it is pretty unrealistic for him to wish to go back or hope to go back, unless he runs into a real God or Goddess. So, Blaze chooses not to worry about such things, when he's perfectly happy in this world.
5. This is a personal opinion. I've moved a lot as a child. The longest I stayed in any one place was for my Bachelor's. So, I've never been attached to places. Family, yes. Friends-- only from college. If I was transported to a different world like Azra-El, there will be little incentive for me to come back to Earth, especially if I believe that I may be years apart from Earth. Now, I would think of my family and friends, but I won't be constantly yearning to go back to them. Does that make any sense? Closest analogy I can think of is my granny who has passed away. I think of her, but I am not stressing over meeting her in the afterlife.
6. There is a motivation that Blaze has carried over. The quest for knowledge. It's not merely the curiosity of a child. He may express his wish to be 'lazy', but he is always reading or learning something. He has mentioned to the Wise One of the Ophanim that he wanted to be good at everything- that's not a wish that's unrelated to his experiences from Earth. On Earth, he didn't have time to learn everything; here he may. Yes, that's a wishy washy, and not a concrete goal, but it suits Blaze's personality. Besides, it's only been a year of existence in this world. There is plenty of time and story for him to develop a real goal.
7. Finally, why is it a necessity for the reader to know of Blaze's previous life? Why not make sense of it through his current actions and current thoughts? This story is being told from Blaze's perspective, but he is not the one writing it. I personally never liked being given the MCs entire background. Why? Because then I could not imagine the MC to be anyone I want to in my imagination.
I think that's all I can cover for now. I realize that you may wish to know more about Blaze, right now, but that is not how I wish to tell my story. However, I do want to assure you that Blaze's reincarnation is not some easy way to introduce modern humor or ideas. And even if it is, does it matter if you like the rest of the story? Blaze's past is not currently important to the story, but when it does become important, I promise that you will know more.
- COMMENTS
xhristianjalmost 2 years agoThis and Life as a New Hire are my all time favourite stories on this site. What this story does even better than LAANH is it rations out the ridiculous and hilarious rhetoric in a really controlled and balanced approach that's ultimately truly enjoyable and is sure to leave a smile on your face.
Also what this story does really really well is its sex scenes rather than monotonous repetitive narratives which frankly get annoying. This one does a great job of individualising each experience and bringing the participants closer which afterall isn't that what sex is supposed to do?
Anyway think this is my 3rd time through and still as good as the first time!
Anonymousover 2 years agoDear Caprcious Dragon,
Your writing has brought me a great deal of enjoyment so far, i look forward your new works.
How are betty and phil? I hope they are well and happy. I would like to see more of them, so please refrain from punting or eating them.
Regards,
Josh_D
ChimeraLoveMeeover 2 years agoThis is one of my favorite stories on this site. I remember reading all the way upto the previous chapter but for whatever reason, I haven't read the finale until now. This series has always been on the back of my mind whenever I read any fantasy stories and when I saw an update from the author, I remembered loving this series and read the whole thing in 3 days. I'm kicking myself for not reading the finale when it came out, because it is one of the most exhilarating climaxes I've ever read. The fights and the reveals were executed outstandingly.
This series also has some of the best world building ever. The world feels like it exists. it has a rich history, different peoples and actual governments. All of these make it feel more tangible. Touching racial issues is always a bold thing to do, especially in stuff like erotica, but I think you managed to depict them surprisingly well.
The only criticism I have is the protagonist's insecurity in his masculinity. You keep focusing on how he definitely is a man and how he is afraid of doing stuff because he might be perceived otherwise. It feels pretty jarring in such a well crafted story.
I'm super excited to read the next arc of the story. You are a great writer CapDargon21 and I'm glad that I was able to read your work.
Anonymousabout 3 years agoThe story was...surprisingly good. Shockingly good that I didn't even see it coming. It's one of those things where one initially enjoys for porn but stayed around for plot. And I think you could expand your audience to Royalroad and Wattpad! Should get the PG 13 version of your story for this too!
yuramwagover 3 years agoMy first comment on your story not becoz I didn't have time to comment on the other stories way back,but yes I didn't have the time.man this is a masterpiece I stumble upon and for the life of me couldn't take a break.I was well engrossed and well entertained.One thing I can proudly say is,you my friend are a talented and gifted story teller.Keep up the good work hope one day you get this published.To immortalized you work.
pk2curiousover 3 years agoWell by now I am a fan . An avid reader of ficterotica . GR8 story . Such a different twist was enjoyable . I agree with you that there were more than enough clues as to Blazes previous life . No more is necessary . I think they are just looking for a logical explanation of how this impossible transformation occurred . Just go with it people . Obviously a new world , a different timeline . With no earthly influences . Yet . That's a good thing . If you promise more to come . Then I can't wait .
Anonymousover 3 years agoI'm a lit reader from past 10-12 years and never ever anything has engaged me or im engrossed in something with such dedication. From past 2-3 days I'm behind my office deadlines, but to hell with it. You are an awesome writer and should keep doing it. Words are less and I'm no writer but if you would have been in front of me then I would have done this. Take a bow Sage Vatsyayan of this era.
marx810about 4 years agoAs both a writer and a fan of smut, I have to say this story is amazing. It took me a few weeks to catch up but the fact that I put in the effort to proves how captivating your world became. I usually don't stick with stories for longer than five chapters or so. I think your story is one of two that I've stuck with well into the double digits.
When I have the time I will definitely have to read it over to catch up on all the hints and story seeds you've been planting throughout everything. I won't lie, I was a little skeptical in the beginning at the idea that none of these angels had discovered so much as masturbation, but one, their naivety made the story more fun, and two, you made it clear that some of them had. I also love the mix of smut and story that you have going on. The sex doesn't feel forced and Blaze's bro-zoning certain girls is interesting, though I do want to see a few break free from it. While not technically "bro"zoning, it was very satisfying when Jie Er was back in the sexual saddle again. Part of me is curious if Elyssa will break through that since I'd assume Blaze would make her wings heal faster. I'm not sure if having them plucked is the same or less damaging than having them ripped out by a Quetzal.
Though speaking of Elyssa, I love her character. Especially with how she spun the tale for Blaze about what actually happened after her torture. I mean, sure the truth will come out to Blaze eventually but I love that she literally sees him turn half demon and go Hulk Smash and her reaction to that is he will never know what actually happened, and I need to get strong enough nip that shit in the bud and protect him from himself.
The use of things like tainting and how other races like Pixies and Undine are treated are also a very nice touch that adds a bit more realism and intrigue to other aspects of the story. And the tournament was really fun! Action scenes can be tricky. If you're too detailed, it gets boring and if you're not detailed enough, it comes across as phoned in and you have a good in between there. The fact that I was sure the tournament could only go one way and you subverted that expectation without it feeling like a cheap cop out was done very well. I also loved Niko's reveal. I honestly didn't see that one coming.
Let's see, what else... Oh! As an unofficial poll, I think that Astrid is my favorite character. She's just the right balance of sexy, funny, and mysterious, though Jie Er is a really close second just because of how overall awesome she is. I also really look forward to Alice getting more screen time and hopefully a scene of her own as much as I love her peeking tendencies. A quickly rising one is Rebecca's mom. I did not think you would pull that particular trigger, especially as quickly as you did lol. I fully approve, especially with her past and reasoning for being so suddenly forward. Is there a Mother's Day equivalent in Azra El? I would adore it if there was some situation where Rebecca realized the best gift she could give was time with Blaze and was just all, "Goddess Dammit, FINE! Just keep it down and give me the damn strap on. Jie Er's really gonna get it." Assuming she didn't just keep the strap on regardless.
Also, I might be in the minority here but I don't overly care about Blaze's past. It could be the writer in me but it doesn't seem overly important to the plot more than how it defines Blaze's actions in this world. When I'm writing, I personally avoid giving unnecessary details because sometimes characters do weird things when digital pen gets to digital paper and you don't want to be cornered into an early reveal or you can't do something interesting because you gave away information that wasn't needed at the time.
I was curious about something though. Was there a reason you put the tournament and the kidnapping into the same chapter? It just seemed like it easily could have been two different chapters with how dark shit got in that one(which I loved btw. It's great when a story can be action packed, sexy, funny, and super dark when necessary) and how the tone changed. I did love the reveal of why Blaze is so powerful and more or less his origins in this world. Lol I was sure he would have begged to take Elyssa's place if she was let go. But I'd say your way was definitely better. Like I'm sure a lot of people are, I anxiously await the demon side of things.
Anyway, I think it's clear that I enjoyed your story and there just isn't enough time to talk about 20 chapters of content in one comment lol. I'm sure now that I'm caught up, my next one will be more concise. Keep up the good work and good luck on the self publishing!
jeff6868about 4 years agoOkay, so I may be a lil different from some of your other readers in that I spread reading this series out over the past couple weeks instead of binging it all in a couple of days. Don't get me wrong though, this series is honestly one of my favorite things that I've read ever, not just on this site. Just wanted to comment to say props for putting so much effort into writing this, the results really show. I'm surprised by how invested I am in this story, its literally become a part of my nightly ritual to read a bit every night before bed. Please please please don't hold out on the second arc for too long. I hope some of my words will help motivate a friendly dragon in its writing endeavors. Can't wait to see what's to come!
Jeff
Anonymousabout 4 years agoI binged this series in 2 days, and this is my third read. I had to go over it again.
I’ve discovered that I usually enjoy subsequent reads than the first one.
If the egg that hatched Blaze was from a concentration of light and dark energies, why is an entirely new being not formed? Is it because humans unlike angels have a more balanced nature?
Also what Nico used in defeating blaze is a rifle, it is used as a rifle... not having energy stone doesn’t negate that. I’m from Nigeria and we have local rifles that don’t require a firing pins. It’s still a gun. So, Sofria’s fury is really righteous.
Dope fight scenes tho.
Looking forward to the next Arc
Ciao, Davies
