All Comments on 'When Ordinary Isn't Ch. 03'

So I take it Peggy owns land in Texus.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Thanks for sharing your creativity.

These two need to get rid of all their secrets! I know you will in other chapters to keep the story going and interesting to the readers. I like the pace and flow. I look forward to reading more. Thanks for your time and imagination.

This is going good!

I'm curious about the characters vs writer...

Have the characters pit you in a position that then felt wrong to be doing/ saying something... That then had to changed?

I don't think I understand your question.

It's a story. The characters don't force an author to do anything. The author is always in control of the characters.

The appearance of lack of control is intentional, if that's what you're asking.

It is so rare to read something here with a literary style and vocabulary matching that to be expected of a pair of high-level clinical-academic/technical characters; it takes the relatively pedestrian- nonetheless highly enjoyable - plot to a level where this readers pleasure is equally raised. Thanks.

Perhaps this plot is not completely transparent, but I'm going to stick it out and see where you go for another 3 or 4 chapters. Since you guys seem to want commentary, I'll tell you that the female of your team suffers from a common female author's problem: too much descriptive crap that does nothing for the flow of the story. It is boring and redundant and of little or no interest to the reader. Clothing detail, how to install a tampon etc, etc. Sometimes the story is enhanced by fleshing out the context of the events with descriptive padding, but much of the time it's useless trivia.

I still can't get into the description of a virtually emaciated woman having "a cute butt". Do you really know what a 5'11" woman at 120 lb would look like? Like an anorexic model! Just a matter of taste I guess. 4* so far.

THe story is interesting, entertaining and enjoyable and free! I never got above a C in english classes, I'm not a writer or ever hoped to be. I did a B on composition I wrote for a college english class, it was a true story and the teacher loved it. That was the extent of my writing career. There fore many of the stories I read on LIT get good marks if they entertain me and make me feel good. Isn't that what its all about? Keep writing.

As usual I'm enjoying reading this story and looking forward to the rest of it but I had such a shock when I finally woke up and realized just who Eric and Peggy are. I've just finished reading the first four chapter of 'The Future Is In The Air' but didn't connect them until we met Kevin Mace in the hanger. Boy do I feel dumb, but at least now I know this story has a happy ending :)