All Comments on 'Whitman'

Fucking just wow. What an amazing build up, perfect power play. More please!

Superb. Extraordinary. Bravo.

Very good story line, and such hot, detailed description of the scene had me wriggling in my chair!

Excellent from start to finish, including grammar and spelling. Hope to read more stories from you. Thank you for sharing this.

5* Jules

Haven't read a story this captivating in a long time.

I was quite impressed. I really enjoy every element of the story in my own life..my lover keeps me quessing..I never know what to expect. I'll definitely make sure he reads this.

Simply remarkable.

*****

Well-written overall, but a slap to the face is assault, not BDSM play. How does she explain the resultant bruise to her coworkers?

Nicely written. She would be quite a pleasure to tame and train. He did a good job of bringing her out and positioning himself as Dominant, but allowed her a leniency she neither wanted nor deserved. I like the phrasing, it's very insightful.

Wow, that was like an instruction manual of how to do it right ;) Loved the way you combined both description and emotions which painted a very vivid picture of the entire scene — the windows across from her down to her stockings pooled around her ankles. Well done!

So incredibly erotic. Lol, I expect all of us with submissive tendencies are clamouring “me, me, me next please!”

I’ve never understood the “face slapping” thing, it’s the wrong kind of pain definitely non erotic and an absolute mood killer, IMHO it has no place in a sexual scene. Can’t quite imagine myself tied like that...unless it’s a low window or really long belt! Is it just me or would anyone else have been offended by the cop’s comment about a transaction?

Thanks for sharing

Tess (UK)

"She found her voice but lost her words" Fuckin hell, One of the best pieces of writing I've seen...

Kl