All Comments on 'Who Do You Love? Ch. 02'

This is just like my first time. It brings back memories. Pleasant memories, mind you

I do like the concept and the characters. However , the way the story is written makes it annoying, to say the least, to read. I want to become intrigued as to what happens next and intoxicate myself with endless possibilities but I cannot. This story is moving too quickly with not enough detail and sorrowful dialogue. These are high school students , we must remember how they actually speak. Definitely would appreciate this concept and story to continue to grow but in a well written manner. Keep up the ideas you have . Except take your time executing them. Explain the details better and events more in depth without so much of a rush. Don't foreshadow by using his feelings of Jack. I really hope you have read this and take this criticism into thought. I will be reading the next chapter

-K

It seems making love with Brad is not the pleasant and loving experience Andy thought it would be. Maybe Jack's attention and love for Andy would be better after all.

Can't wait to read the next chapter....plz hurry up

I was liking where this was going but what Jack did was disaponting I was hoping he love Andy and would treat him right, What tipe of men is Brad that he has to rape some one he likes and Andy how can he not defend himself more... not sure to like to continuo reading....have to thing about it

I was hoping this story would get better, but after this chapter, I'm done, not worth wasting my time on.