All Comments on 'Why? The Reason'

Two things... One... She must have dived out the window head first and landed on her head to have died jumping out of a second story window... And two... When has anyone EVER been able to trust the fbi???...

-jaye-

Yet he never asked why, or how, his stay at home wife became a thief’s bookkeeper. Nor how long she’d been doing it. It’s a fairly important point.

I read the original work and though I was saddened that the author did not continue with it. This clap trap is really not good in any feasible way in comparison to the original. It adds nothing to the original and only shows the disparate writing style and quality between the two.

Perfect

What we do for family

Awesome Loving wife. You had going till near the

The MONEY SHOT: "I had helped take down a major crime organization, and they were upset that I didn't have a New York concealed weapons permit." This isn't hyperbole! If you'd written that Geno got off doing 5-10 at Club Fed and our Hero was sentenced to 25-99 in Sing-Sing for his "illegal handgun" it would've still passed the smell-test!

GREAT STORY!!!

Low grade cheap thriller.....

With so much co-incidents and everything fortunately

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Nothing logical or connected with original

I gave this story a 5 because I am a sucker for happy endings. It wasn't very realistic and it was 180 degrees from the original, but it kept me interested.

Messed up the crisis a bit but I still loved it. Keep em comming.

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

5* all the way.

A different type of RAAC

I also liked that you stuck to the original which while was interesting, had been left unfinished.

Good writing. You adhered to the original texture and your sequel answers the grey zones in the original.

Well done.

Great story AAAAA+++++

Excellent completion of an unfinished story. 5*

So much better than the original one.

Plausible & fun.

5 🌟

Bill

Reading again. Early Stoney was pretty damn good, but your continued improvement has been amazing.

Hey now. That was pretty good.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

different but not a satisfying ending

Gave it a 4. Its not the most satisfying ending, the money and criminals plot I'm not so sure on and I honestly don't know about the reconciliation. Melissa screwed up bad even if she wasn't cheating, willing to abandon her life and family over some accounting criminal plot and rather then taking them with her or explaining she was in danger she'd rather stomp on her and her kids hearts. The guy Conrad sounded like a piece of crap too, threatening the husband through his muscle and generally making things worse. Still it was an ending and not too bad all things considered, I think the constraints of the original story made it tough to have a satisfying ending and certainly a happy ending and you did your best with the clay you had to work with.

A good ending to an abandoned story. 5*

You were right when you said rough. Definitely frayed around the edges. But great plot and pretty well executed after the haphazard first page. I liked that you tried to mask that with your character being flustered

“Isn't it funny that New York has some of the harshest gun control laws and still has one of the highest murder rates?”

Actually, New York has one of the lowest murder rates (bottom 20%) and the harsh laws are likely part of the reason.

Ok cut at least 25%

*Stringent (not strident)

Good story. The most dangerous cities and states in the US has the most harsh gun laws. Remember, guns don't kill people, unstable, angry and weird Democrats do, lol.

Have enough guts to post this comment or are you too PC?

Pretty good story, lousy logic. Why would he have to know "why"? Why would he go to New York? And why would he just start blazing away with his gun? Too many whys.

Anon from two months ago may have had a point but miss spelled one word - it is spelled Republicans !

Wow! 5 stars!

Great story with a great ending!

Bill S.

Second time reading. It's still good. LP

Pretty action packed ending, almost lived up to the old saying, 'Curiosity Killed The Cat".

better than the other story that was never finished. Strange that Kelly dies from a second story fall, maybe 22 story? A little too "John Wayne" at the end but its your story

Second time reading. Yes, still works as a good story.

Perry Mason lives and his name is Geno!

Stoney, this plot sank faster than your user name! D-U-M-B. That spells MOON

Fuck you...

You turned the story into a RAAC? Go fuck yourself

@Anony: "Fuck you... You turned the story into a RAAC? Go fuck yourself."

Hey genius, RAAC means Reconciliation At Any Cost, implying the cheated party has to get over a betrayal. There was none here, the disappearance of the wife was to protect the family. Try flexing that prodigious intellectual prowess next time, instead of shooting your load early.

Sucks big time

I thought this was pretty good tbh. 5 stars from me

New York has a low murder rate.

Pretty good

Geno is killed and then he is in prison?

Anon 8 months ago: "guns don't kill people" You are right: bullets kill people.

1 star for the plot involving the mob.

5 stars for the well written story.

Although, I really do hate violence of any kind.

1 star for the plot involving the gangsters and violence.

5 stars for the well written story.

Ugh... Just a mess of convoluted plot and nonsense. She is cheating and then not cheating, she disappears without anything and doesn't contact anyone and then suddenly she is calling everyone, she suddenly has a separate phone that he never saw the bills for and that wasn't the first thing he looked at? He drives to New York, sneaks onto a terribly secured estate at just the right time to save everyone... Not the best.

Harry scary has my vote.

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

In my opinion, when you introduce a mystery, it's only good manners to later spend a couple of words explaining it. Like who's Kelly, whom did she call in Nashville, etc...

Personally, I'd probably also have put a non-fatal bullet through Conrad, just for the pain and suffering caused by the mess he dragged the poor family through.

Really not sure the low-brow comments how the wife was cheating. Did they even read til the end?

Glad you put some sort of ending to this story, still can’t get why the original author didn’t push the two submission he mentioned at the beginning of Ch 1…

James Bond, written by a third grader

Critics are harsh. The first two pages were excellent. Thinks went kind of the rails in the third page with all the exposition by Geno. But meh was a laudable effort at an extension to a tough story. And yeah yo all the dumbasses out there, the wife was not having an affair. Grow up!

I would like to know how Melissa got mixed up with organised crime, it really intrigues me. I mean can she be really trusted, really! Until that is known I would not fully trust her. I mean how would an ordinary 'Bookkeeper' get involved in it like she did. I feel it was glossed over. Also did she have some hidden cash she is not letting on? I feel she has.

Well worth a 5 star. you bolted on a very good ending to a good story that for some reason had remained unfinished.

"she just wouldn't say anything rather than lie." - No, she'd just cheat, which she has done, even if they haven't fucked yet.

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If she isn't taking anything, then her lover must be loaded, but what about HIS family?

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"And sadly, I didn't help the situation." - Why sadly? Why is it his job to defend his wife's relationship with their daughters?

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"New York has some of the harshest gun control laws and still has one of the highest murder rates?" - Actually, that's not true, New York is number 34.

Slightly unbelievable story with an incomprehensible plot but hey it's fantasy so maybe it fits.

Okay story with flaws. A real farce of a story. No way this would ever happen in real life. Really how do you sell the hero from breaking into the home and shooting 3 mob figures just before you wife and her boss is executed. Just the way you wrote this farce .

A nice, if hard to believe, ending to a old story. 4*

Please do an alternate story/ending to “Uncle Jason lives with us”. I never felt the idea was giving a proper life, no way the mc would put up with that for so many years.

I'm on page two, but had to make a comment. You pore over something you are reading, not pour. Also, when you climb, you go farther, not further, because it is distance, not time. Back to the engrossing story!

Me again pore/pour... Your last.line was perfect. Five stars. JPB

This story sounds nothing like the original. Just didn't work for me.

Creative and poignant extension to a tough original story. It is a quite a departure but for me it worked, because anything else would be soul crushing to read. Don't understand the commenters below who say he should not take Melissa back (besides being still technically married). Did they actually read the story? And the reason why? If after all of the events, and his own searching, and saving her and Conrad's family, knowing now the truth, and he did NOT take her back, let alone with passion, then either (a) all of what we have read about his thoughts and struggles and misery and their marriage before her disappearance, were then false or (b) he never really loved her that much anyways, and then go back to (a). I mean really people?

pointless mess.

Fucking worthless story with the bitch Melissa.

ANOTHER WORTHLESS ARMY PUSSY-WHIPPED PARATROOPER WITH NO BALLS WHO SHOULD NOT TAKE BACK THE BITCH MELISSA.

What a useless cunt MC to easily forgive the bitch wife Melissa who was giving up her family on instructions of her client!!

Cunt paratrooper husband didn't know who his bitch wife was doing bookkeeping for!!

Almost 8 months with the bitch absent everything is back to normal!!

1 star 🌟 wonder

I see the hard-of-thinking have been dominating recent comments. Enjoyed the story. Five stars.

complied => compiled

feverously => feverishly

regiment => regime

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Du hättest den ersten teil gründlicher lesen sollen. Melissa hat nicht gearbeitet und sie war mit Arschloch in Afrika. Hier passt einiges nicht zusammen.

Melissa didn’t work and she was in Africa with asshole. Here some things do not fit together.

Full 5 stars.

Created a reunion without the need for forgiving something down and dirty. Very well done.

Decent ending to this story that I honestly didn't care for originally. My biggest complaint is why didn't Melissa take her family with her when she ran? How did her running protect them? Big logic holes for me.

She may not have fucked Conrad but she definitely fucked over her family with her abandonment without explanation or apology after telling her husband she loved someone more. It doesn't get more cruel than that.

Melissa was never successfully made a victim in my mind. A single "I love you" from her in the entire story....

Author took a potentially interesting premise of a story and converted it to stupidly boring fantasy. One commentator had accurately summarized -- James Bond written by a 3d grader.

Maybe Mark will put a bun or two in Melissa's oven...

FYI, NY State does not have one of the highest homicide rates in the US --- not even close. As of 2020, when this story was published, it was ranked 32nd (with #1 being the state with the highest rate). Massachusetts is another state with very strict gun control laws, and a very low homicide rate (it's ranked 46th). Louisiana had the highest murder rate of any state in 2020. States right behind Louisiana are Arkansas, Missouri, Mississippi, South Carolina, Alabama and Tennessee --- all lacking in gun control laws. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_U.S._states_and_territories_by_intentional_homicide_rate

How does Stoney write and publish so much after being jailed over January 6th

Interesting take on a cheating wife. Parts seem pretty fanciful, but then, it is fiction.

Funny how dead Geno spent the rest of his life in prison...

Not a bad effort, although the absurd nick-of-time timing is hard to believe. Three stars.

JPB

That's pretty damn good combat shooting.

It was all over in 2-3 seconds!

Loved it

Leave it to the fucktarded liberal that thinks guns are the problem. God I hate stupid fucking liberals.

Yeah, it was worth it. 5 stars, the Bear approves. It was a good story. As I've said before, I love happy endings. The M/C was a stand-up guy. And he loved his wife. For whatever reason, he stuck it out. Even if it was just being stubborn, he had to know why. That's all it takes. As usual, Stoney, great story. More, please.

The BEAR

MC wonder why NY has the strictest gun laws but suffers from high gun deaths. Maybe, just maybe, it's because of gun nuts like him who knowingly bring guns illegally across state borders to shoot up the neighborhood.

It was a decent story though not sure if a husband would stick with it in real life like the mc did I'm pretty sure most won't I would like to know how the hell gino died at the scene if he is going to spend the rest of his life in prison that just doesn't work not even in a story for this is a loving wife story which means it needs the realistic views and stand point in it and geno dying at the scene but apparently is going to spend the rest of his life in prison isn't realistic cause it's not even possible other than that really it was a decent story I wouldn't say 4 or 5 stars good but I'll give a 3 cause of the unrealistic views that was in the story hurts the rating

I keep in mind that the original story was abandonment. Stoney took it down a different road for an ending. I'm impressed. The other toothless ananymous twats who drooled condescending criticism probably couldn't write an essay that would hold water. Excellent work. So well written.

Thank you

Cookie

5 cookies for you

Great story. No stupid tropes. Story line is logical and consistently progressive and in character with their roles and situational response. The bit about NY gun laws in spot on. Like D/C, Chicago and Baltimore such laws have had no effect on the growing crime rate, using guns, and public safety is worse for that and the State refusal to prosecute perpetrators.

My only qualm here is the bit, used by nearly every author, of the women getting pregnant before they're married; presumptive sexually active all along they are suddenly pregnant just before they're married. This a logical absurdity.

That aside, another great story by a great author!

Not a great read but not bad,

I’ve rese the original and this sequel. It is a bit disconcerting - same character names very similar circumstances, but very different stories that share nothing by those basics. It doesn’t help that the original is a better story while this sequel is fluff. YMMV

While not James Bond or Jason Bourne, it wasn't too bad a story, maybe just a little cheesy. I haven't read the original story that lead to this one, don't know if I will. While reading, I kept thinking that a lot of LW stories the MC says that things would have been good for a divorce if the spouse only let them know before cheating. I guess the fact they didn't have the face to face talk was the reason for Mark to continue looking for answers. Understandable.

So glad you finished it.

Excellent story Mr. Webb. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Thank you!

Great story! 5 blazing stars!

Nicely done.

How can geno never see the outside of a prison if he died at the scene that just makes no sense and to even try to explain it will just make you look like a idiot other than that this story was just plain stupid and the events would never happen the way these did

I liked the gamut of creative spellings of taekwondo

That was a wild ride Mr. Toad.

A great story and not over the top. I like how it took a while for him to get his skills. He wasn’t a born secret agent and the back and forth training and figuring out things was intriguing.

One of the best stories I've read on this site. Great job!

3 stars - at least that other story with no ending has some kind of resolution in this recap.

Having spent 16 years in the military, the bit of training the MC had was woefully inadequate to even attempt any of the things outlined here. However, this is just fairy land dreaming and totally unbelievable.

Did he not know she had a job? as a Bookie