All Comments on 'Wild Woman Named Jill'

I had a hard time reading this story because of the writing conventions. Namely why are there so many paragraphs? Surely it would have been acceptable to make a few of those into one longer paragraph. I can't comment on the story itself because it was so distracting reading all those short paragraphs.

Interesting comment on short paragraphs.

Of course online type text is at best awkward to read, long paragraphs blur the stream of thought and they tend to get scanned rather than read.

Far more common with long paragraphs read online is that the reader will scan a portion, they simply click back and go on to another story or article.

This is well known with government type documents which I also write, check any Adobe type format.

This particular piece is heavy with discussion, and much done in what is know as "asides". Those are thoughts from the character's point of view. Typically then just a single line, sometimes just a single word.

I also publish commercially, for online newsletters, etc. The number ONE comment from my publishers is: "Shorten the paragraphs."

Just a style, I will say you are the very first person to ever comment that short lines are difficult to read online.

MGM

I agree from a typesetters point of view (my profession), shorter snappy paragraphs are better in this online context. Slightly longer paragraphs are ok (not too excessive) for hardcopy novels and magazines but when scrolling down a screen it's easier to loose track of your place in a long paragraph.

I believe it is something to do with the eye following the overall shape of the text rather than the content.

Boring work stuff aside.. I loved the story!

LOL fun -

these stories piss me off.....so boring...so predictable....such trash

This story definitely nref at least one more chapter. Really good and funny.

Fun story!