All Comments on 'Wilderness Paradise Pt. 03'

Worth the wait. At first the flashbacks were a bit confusing but now, I like them. I see the relevance to the story. Is it too soon to ask for pt. 4? Hurry.

story is so good should have been a book. or maybe i am impatient and want to read the whole thing at once. so hurry with the rest please.

Another incredible addition to this story! Im just going to predict something here; i think that the army guy,(sorry i forgot his name), is going to get beaten shitless OR he is goin to capture rachel and there will be a big rape sex scene either way its fine with me. I know that writing a story can be a little chalenging so take your time making part 4, dont rush it or it wont turn out good

Happy writing! :)

-joe

I can't wait for part 4. Great story!!!

Really can't wait for part 4. Excellent story and well written!

Great erotic sex between brother and sister, but a little scary of what is going to happen to the three girls.

Thanks for the chapter

I hope you don't end up doing some ending where gets together with that other guy. Really enjoying the story between them.

This has been an amazing piece of erotica. I can't wait for the next part.

I'm really enjoying this action adventure. Thanks!

And you should be sure to thank whoever gifted you the thesaurus.

Now the big words are separating me from my involvement with your characters. That said, 5 stars because you are an excellent storyteller/writer. I'm totally in, but I don't want your word choices to distract me.

I just loved it! Big words and all - had to spend time with the old dictionary but it was worth it! Who are you? In my humble opinion your stories are way above the other rubbish you read here! Please write more ... I almost don't want to finish the remaining parts!!!

You are really a gifted writer. I have so many favorite verses from your stories. And yes, I've read ALL your stories on Lush. I have a quesiton which I've emailed you. I'm a fan and find myself missing my brother.

Ok, your thesaurus is just annoying.

writer indeed...you are one who can really write great erotica with a great plot like a morir scene...

It was like reading a story out of a movie with hot steamy sex scenes

First off thanks for the good read. You are talented but you remind me of my mother who was an aspiring writer who never could get published. Her problem was she was so good at using fancy words that in order to read any of her writings you had to have a dictionary to look up what words meant 2 or 3 times per page. Thankfully your writings aren't quite that bad, but I'd suggest maybe keep from using words that most people would need to look up to once every other page. I do a lot of reading so I find I understand more words than the average person so if I find your use of $10 words distracting I know lots of others will struggle with them too. Like I said above though it is a good read and I'm enjoying it. Thanks for submitting it and I look forward to reading some of your other works.

Your vocabulary is impressive but frequent usage of archaic adjectives becomes tedious in short order. Perhaps using more contemporary verbiage would enhance the "readability" of your otherwise excellent prose and story line.

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