All Comments on 'Windows into the Soul Ch. 01'

This is a good first story with lots of possible twists. Good character development and a nice flow to the story. I look forward to the next chapter.

Looks like an intriguing storyline-- I like your characters. There are a couple errors that distract from your writing (ie with there/their/they're) but that can easily be cleared up by an editor. Looking forward to seeing the next chapter!