All Comments on 'Without You I Have Nothing Ch. 05'

this story is becoming more and more like a soap opera and in don't mean in a good way. sadly, even your great writing style can't redeem it anymore.

Please continue this serie! It's so emotional and intense. Surely yours are some of the best characters in this site.

Before you go any further JA tell us what kind of novel this is. Is it romance, mystery horror because I would agree that the emotions are intense.

The characters are 100% Aussie and therefore quite beyond the knowledge (understanding) of a lot of people. Do something and spell it out in LITTLE words that this is a novel cause it seems as though some have lost sight of that fact.

My money is still on Peter but if Jennifer were close by I would be tossing my cap into the ring.

Keep the good work flowing.

Anonymous stop hiding. Be brave JA won't attack you. Well perhaps it is best if you hide.

Come on JA speed it up - I am here for the long haul.

I was actually very impressed when a western writer says, via one of his characters, says "I speak Lao, Vietnamese, Cantonese, Madarin, Malay, Thai, Tagalog, and Cambodian," etc. <p>

That shows the writer knows the various Asian groups. And any decently educated person --- outside of the people in charge of America at the present time --- should. Those languages are spoken by groups numbering in the hundreds of millions, not thousands or tens of thousands or just millions. I hate it when authors, supposedly well read writers say things like "He speaks Chinese," or "He speaks Laotians". <p>

"Peter" is right: there is no such thing as "Chinese" or "Laotians"! <p>

Now,,, to the crux of the matter: Peter the Great. <p>

So, Peter is crying unstoppable tears, here, just when he had just cummed deep in ole' Susie, eh? LOL! <p>

No wonder Jennifer must keep reminding himself this man is GAY and she can't afford to have a gay boyfriend, however nice he is, always kissing her in the hair, etc. <p>

As our German commentator said --- and I came from somewhere in Asia but have lived in America since the later 1970's, so I know the "American culture" as well as its language [as various regional dialects/colloquialisms] as much as the next average Joe] --- this is a bad soap. <p>

Soaps are good only when you are young and are easily impressed with silly dialogues and fake tears and bad actings. <p>

Anyway, your "Peter" character here doesn't only act gay, not just to "Jennifer" but to me and other critical readers as well (except for your other pompom girl fans), he's also no more than a 13 year old boy. He knows how rich he is, so he is very spoiled; it shows how easily he gets pissed. But, boy, he's Peter the Great to sick children and elderly at the local hospitals --- he showers them with gifts and other such little niceties. <p>

Finally, he acts like like a White-Noise combination of the "Church Lady" [by Dana Carvey] and George Smiley [by Al Franken, both from Saturday Night Live --- or is George Smiley John La Carre's MI6 007 agent dude?]....

Its boring as all hell!

I've read this far hoping it would pick up some speed but alas, nothing.