by Mr. Marvel
Just another unfinished story on here,as with so many others,,a waste of time to get started reading,if there is no ending and it was posted more than 5 years ago,,dont see an ending in sight......
Just two points to bear in mind to improve a very good story:
You seem to mix current and past tense, as well as swapping viewpoints between first-person (EG: I did this) and third (William did that) when talking about the same character, even within the same paragraph.
Other than that? immensely enjoyable - now off to read ch2.