by Mr_Shoggoth
Also, I'm absolutely in fricking love with the adorable extra-dimensional bunny. Holly...*melts while seeking words*
Also: darn you for referencing her "little pink nose" ...so cute... Damn it, I'm not a frigging furry! ...shit...
Why in the hell do they keep saying "timeline"?! Even immediately after talking about a machine designed to detect parallel *dimensions* (btw, parallel universes would make more sense. Dimensions...kinda works, but not really.) Seriously. A timeline is a totally different thing from a parallel universe or higher/lower/parallel dimension. I'm enjoying the heck out of the story so far, but every time I read "timeline" it's like nails on a chalkboard.
...that there was no mention of either Lord Frith or El-Ahrairah in the legends Holly recounted of her world's creation story.
Nah, just kidding. While it would have been an interesting homage, I like how you've done some world-building, and without an info-dump, too. The little glimpses you're giving us through narration and character interaction are tantalizing, and make for a more gripping tale, certainly much more so than if you'd just dumped all the details for us, as some writers often (mistakenly, in my opinion) do.
I love how all the tough-as-nails military types have the mushy warm fuzzies for the cotton-tailed sexpot. (The happy-go-lucky big softie of a pit bull is a great cypher too.)
You're building a Multiverse aren't you?
Two stories with alternate timeline hopping, and one with a super-computer telewarping through levels of space-time-whatever.
There's going to be a crossover to save existence, I bet.
You've developed a really good science fiction plot, spiced with nice characters, hot sex and really good writing!
Please continue!!!