All Comments on 'Working Class Hero'

Great story, well written, keep writing

That was some Great Writing Johnny shure put that slick Lawyer in his place.

Atlanta,Ga

Now and then a writer can take a plot we have seen, and used, many times in the past and shine it up. That's when we realize why the loving wives category is so popular. We all know that the same five or six stories are told over and over. How many ways can we writers cover marriage, infidelity and temptation? Jack_Straw has delivered a well paced, romantic feel-good story with this effort and I thank him for it.

Why don't these type stories have their own site for angry, abusive, lack of self worth and self confidence mmales.

a bit trite, but good enough over all. I missed more involvement by the kids. Also, 2 adults and 2 teens in a 1000 square foot house? Thats asking for trouble.

But I would expect nothing less from you.

First rate stuff!

Jack

The story had no suspense but it went down

smoothly and made the day pleasanter. Nice to know

that someone was able to count on his friends, though the

wife apparently did not have any idea that she was living

in a goldfish bowl!

The lawyer was guilty of jumping before he studied the

terrain.

Dear Garbage, re-read your incoherent statement and you will see why "garbage" is so appropriate for your comments. You obviously didn't read the same high quality story I read. Get your hand off your pecker and stop being disappointed that it wasn't a jerk-off story.

Dear Nice Enough, I know of a family of seven people who lived in a 1,000 sqft home in Detroit suburbs. All five kids went to college and are now VERY successful in their professions and have influence with many high ranking people in the political and business worlds. It's not the size of the house but the size of the loving hearts in that house that makes the difference.

Very good job of writing Jack Straw.

A nice read. But also a surprise. I'm getting to be surprised when an author on this site seems to know how to use the English language well. Keep it going!!

A well told tale of a wife targeted by a predatory male. It was a nice touch using the couple's daughter as the mother's wake-up-call.<P>

25 years ago my wife was taken to lunch by a predator in the firm where she worked as a receptionist. He proposed that they have a "nooner" in his words. She was still in shock when she told me about it that evening. The kind of thing described by the author can happen to anyone at any time.<P>

Thanks for the story, jack_straw.

I enjoyed it throughout and thanks for the read.

until they reach thier thirties or so and this wife went thru a stage of growing up suddenly. Childhood dreams of lust and marriage often ruin many women's lives. They get married to young, have to many children, them wind up divorced on a working girls salary. This couple has something going for them, they married in lust but in this case lsut and love were intermingled. Once the wife realized thru the intersection of her daughter that she was destroying her life, her marriage, and her family she finally matured into an adult and realized she really was her husbands wife. I do have a question, why be concerned of having children in your forties? Most women have children to young and before their maturity makes real mothers of them. I am a married male, second marriage, getting near seventy. My mid forties wife and I have two children, one eight and one five. Tell me again what the problem is. Age isnt a factor in having children, maturity and ability to take care of the children is.

I would never consider offering suggestions. I will just salute the author of this well written, entertaining story

and look forward to many more.

You can't avoid being measured as one of this sites very best, especially after this work.<P>

Many who aspire are and should read you closely to see your deft movements and strong meaningful yet concise dialog.<P>

Intelligently you play in the most emotional arena while delivering arousal and consequence as appropriate to your story's foundation. You make it look easy but it couldn't happen without personal discipline and high standards.<P>

Jack - you are easy to appreciate and look forward to.<P>

With Very High Regard

I hate wimp stories. Its wonderful to see the good guy win. Well written. Thanks

And a happy ending, it doesn't get any better than that. Thank You!

A long time indeed since I've enjoyed a "loving wives" story as much as this one. I come out from under my bridge and salute you! Thanks

I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!

At last a real loving wives story. We all have temptation thrown at us sometime in our lives how we handle it is important. Truth and trust are paramount in marriage if people dont go along with that then they should'nt get married.You get jail time for purgery after you have sworn to tell the truth so help you god and tell a lie, so why does'nt this happen in marriage ?

It felt like a slice of life story from a different era. Sad to say that with the decline of grass root and civil society organizations more and more people are turned into insulated powerless loners.<P>

Not so here! Strong and close net of caring and loving people stand by you. I can't remember when I last seen a story with this kind of social emphasis as opposed to the regular Rambo -karate man Marlboro man go it alone crappola. <P>

To top it all, you put the surprising twist two thirds into the story, where most don't expect the twist to be, and you respected the usually much maligned woman character -extra bravo for that!

Jack has taken the "same old . . . same old" and re-arranged it into a delightful story. It seems to me that is now the task of those who post in LW and Jack has done it exceedingly well. A very, very small point . . . Crown Royal is rye whiskey (sometimes called Canadian Whiskey) not bourbon.

author who can create multi-faceted characters in a short story. There are even fewer in Literotica. Jack has done it very well. I disagree with Crabtree that the same old has been done to death. Each story that creates a unique character is a different story, and is new and fresh. The reactions of those character are endless.

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The problem I see is that the Muslim censors only accept stories that conform to their sick ethic of "Stone the adulteress." It is hard to show a fanatic in any other light, which has been done to death. This story would have been good even if she had cheated. Would our hero's forgiveness (which was very well stated) never allow him to get past the pain? I'd love to see that story) I digress. One of the things that made this story special, and it would have been if she cheated or not, was the way Jack surrounded the principals with interesting spear carriers. The daughter peeking 'round the corner. The boss whose plate is too full.

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Jack has created a community, of the sort that most of us would love to be a part of. Although there are those who complain that the lack of privacy is stifling, most of us want a place where everyone knows your name.

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I could go on about the insight into the character of folks who follow a different path than college, by choice, and the pressure our evolving society puts on that choice.

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However, I'd rather air my pet peeve about unions and the destructive influence of them on the "working man." All one has to do is look at the living standard of auto workers in non-union shops to understand that they are far better off than their counterparts in the dying companies burdened with the union mindset. Even the un-American idea that somehow moving into "management" would be disloyal is encouraged. How sick is that? Does a man's job change his moral values, his character?

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I could go on, and frequently do, but my point is that Jack did a wonderful job of showing the mentality of a "union man," while at the same time showing that the "union" world view didn't help. What was more important, his union connect to politicians, or the shady characters? What played more heavily on the slime ball's choice, the union or the life connections to movers and shakers?

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Sorry, it's a tough soapbox to get down from. My favorite author on this site died recently and I stopped reading the stories here. I'm glad to see that there are others who I can enjoy as much as I did Josephus' work. I do wish someone would finish Dilemma.

If I'm going to knock anonymous posters I shouldn't be one.

This story was a pleasure to read. The writing was good, the characters were believable, and the plot was nicely thought out. I wish there were more authors like this. Thanks for an enjoyable tale.

Great story! I just hope i can do justice to this type of story when I write my loving wife stories.

I don't believe I could live through that love making even when I was young!! Things were hitting road bumps so it was lucky that Brittany was home and talked to her mom.. Most men just might have beaten the man when he stepped out of the office but words have persuasive force, don't they!?? Great ending-- a happy one..

Normally I don't read stories this long, but this one certainly held my interest. Keep up the great work!

Jackstraw, I knew that this story was heading for a fine score when the daughter said her piece. Sure we have seen the "just miss" stories before, but this was a nice way of driving the point home. <p>

My only wonder is what went through her mind when she changed her outfit? Shame at seeing her actions through her daughter's eyes? Guilt? Or just the sick feeling of getting caught.<p>

That does bring up one other point. Why did she even bother to show up for the dinner? She had to know that her husband would hear about the "dinner" and about how she originally dressed (and her later changing) as soon as he got home.p>

Oh well just something to ponder.<p>

Keep up the good work.

CCM

Good job. Keep up the great writing. You are one of few.

A minor point Crown Royal, Canada's leading premium Canadian whisky is not bourbon. Each is distinct just as Irish whiskey and Scot Whisky are differnt.

Thanks for this excellent piece. And for creating a believable husband character. I'm tired of reading about wimpy or oblivious husbands...

It was very interesting seeing the way the wife explained it and how the husband reacted. And, then near the end was that twist.

But, then the wife and husband were fortunate for that. Anyways, true love survives so it was quite nice! :)

not really erotic.

jackass lawyer. Overall, author - you obviously realize that adding the consequence component to this story would have made it a "home run" vs. a good single! Better luck next time.

The husband was a fool for staying with her, she thinks she better then him so it only a matter of time.

I'm glad that "Anonymous in canada" is not god, we'd all be dead. I guess, unlike everyone else, he has never had a weak moment. Your story was well done. You may have gone over the top with how important he was at the confrontation, but it was minor. I'd have liked to seen something in it with the mother thanking the daughter also. Thanks for writing. - Ttom.

...this is how it's supposed to be.

A big 5 for a wonderful story. Thank you

Great freakin story.

It is a nice change seeing a story where there is temptation, disillusionment, but having friends and family to shack us out of our comfortable life toface reality. It's nice to see not everyone is totally driven by selfish desires without a thought of what it will cost.

Everyone, I mean everyone, male and female, goes through tests like this one. It show us what we are really made of and if we are the person we thought we were.

Thanks again, Rich

A really fine read with a wonderful outcome. R.Y.

Just 2 things I didn't like:

1. That she was warned by her Daughter. That is just as bad as if she would have been warned by her husband and has the same problem: Namely that it wasn't really her decision to call it off. All we know now is that she is 'clever' enough not to cheat 'in broad daylight', not that she is loyal enough not to cheat.

2. It was a bit cheesy that suddenly Hubby knew everyone and his dog. I don't like stories where the 'cheatee' suddenly is revealed to be an ex-Navy-SEAL/Killercyborg and kills everyone, including his cheating wife, her lover and Sarah Conner.

Of course this here is a far cry from that but it has I bad taste.

Well written and told a lot of story in a short format. I agree to a point with the last commentator: the daughter's intervention kind of takes away somewhat from the decision the wife made. As she herself admitted, if her daughter was talking about divorce and cheating, then maybe hubby might know, too. I also wonder how naive the wife must have been: they live in a somewhat small community, the big boss at her work is a life-long close friend of hubby, she goes out twice for girls night out at a local spot and she is seen publicly carrying on with flirting and dancing with this seducer, and she then goes out to dinner (and originally plans on wearing a very slinky dress, etc.) at a local restaurant with the seducer. Her hubby is very much a part of the community, as is she, as are their respective families. She has to realize that word would get out about her "secret" intimate meetings with the new man in town. She has to realize that the shoe will drop. That whole part is what makes it all a little hard to believe. I would have preferred that the wife come to her realization with something less than the daugher accusing her of intending to cheat on her father and predicting divorce. It would have made the wife's motivation in backing out of the seduction more about love for hubby and family (and fear of losing both, certainly), and less about pure fear of getting found out (as it was obvious to her daughter).

Nevertheless, really good.

One of the best!!!!!

This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. Not just an incredible storyline with an amazing ending, but one of the most beautifully written. The story was captivating and the sex was hot!

"They just stared into each other's eyes at the naked lust, the ferocious passion that was brewing between them."

My favorite line that says it all. Intense. Thanks.

Way to go!

One for the good guys

A true loving wife. And a loving husband as well. Kudos!

It was interesting to read her thinking of excuses while realizing they were bullshit... and not paying attention to that little voice in her head until the voice of her daughter made it blatantly clear what was at risk...

To her credit, she was competing against a professional seducer of women... can't completely blame her for at least falling for what he was dishing out - though it wouldn't have excused her for following through, if she had...

Great story. Only one fault. I think the ending should have some comments from the mother to her daughter stating how she should thank her for getting her head out of her a__ and thinking more about the family instead of herself.

And one of the best stories I've read here in a while!

Wow. No need to BTB. No horrific revenge on the other man. Nobody went to jail or ran off to be a lumberjack or truck driver somewhere. Just a good love story, well done. Congrats!

A working man's man. No waiting for something to happen. Get right to the point and take the bull by the horns before their put on your head. Action over letting things come to a head and nothing can prevent divorce, sorrow, hate and unimaginable depression.

Good one

I've always said we won't see a perfect society until we have perfect people; but now I can see how we could be closer than I thought possible if every one had enough friends. Great story! I'm going to be smiling for the rest of the day.

Really, yea names and sci fi are hard. I have been reading some of your stories, they are enjoyable. I am glad the couple wins in this story. There is plenty of revenge, hate or threesome action and consent. I have tried to put myself in these stories, a very bad idea, my wife would kick my ass for one and it seems to have an effect on my thinking. Thanks again forsome enlighting stories.

love how this story weaved through the emotions and the pitfalls that they both went through. so glad that he showed the lawyer how he was the better man over all

I wish there were more gems like this one in LW. Thank you! *****

Get a DNA test.

...Now you analmousies should reconsider your demands for DNA testing, when a fictional character gets fictionally knocked up.

After all, if all you analmousie's daddies had done so? On Real Life, you all would have been aborted!

And the Literotica site would be so much poorer for the lack of your nasty insinuations about the authors and vicious threats against fictional women.

This story made more sense than the six or so I read.

Abetter revenge story than what happened to Archie.

Not sure he's a hero. Just a man protecting his wife and family. In any way possible.

It's always nice to have lots of friends. Both in high and low places.

Anonymous from 9/4

That's what makes him a hero.

A well written and well structured story where none of the actions or thoughts of the main characters annoyed me or were illogical. Quite a rarity on this site for me.

Jack, you have been one of my favorites, ever since I started reading on this and those other sites. I always enjoy your wit and your unique ability to tell a great tale! Thanks for all that you do for us.

And you decided to go along with it after you find out she can't be trusted.oh well, stupid is as stupid does

just a MAN saving his family and doing what's right. TK U MLJ LV NV

Still five stars. The daughter was the star.

Like it or not... believe it or not... there are damned few women who can be truly trusted to keep their legs together if they're 99% sure that they have a clear shot at fucking a guy they want to fuck and getting away with doing it.

For women, their cunt is their tool. They use it to get their boyfriends and husbands. They use it to get their husband or boyfriend to buy things and do things for them. They use the promise of their pussy to get them to buy them nice clothes, take them to fancy restaurants and to take them to plays, movies, dancing and to other social events. They do it because they're whores who barter with fucks in lieu of cash. Being married is security and a convenience... and also sometimes an inconvenience but they'll definitely fuck a man they're not married to if they want his cock and they're sure they can have it without their husband ever knowing they did it or of their excitement while fucking and sucking it.

Take what I've written as testimony from a very experienced man who's had a thirty five year career of fucking attractive engaged and married women. Women DO love big cocks. Do NOT believe their bullshit about size not mattering to them. When they see what I'm going to shove up into their cunts, I see their eyes glaze over. Whether they're nineteen or forty five years old, their cunts are soaked and ready for action. They start taking stupid risks to keep fucking me and I have to be the one who protects them from themselves by teaching them HOW to cheat and not get caught or raise suspicions.

I've never needed to get married because, in my position, I have access to thousands of wives. When I choose the one I want to fuck, I've rarely missed... and I do mean RARELY. Some of them put up a light resistance AFTER their panties are off because they want to believe they were 'forced' but they were married whores who took my cock and my cum into their cunts and their mouths... and sometimes their asses. Whenever they ask me to use a condom, I always say, "I never use one on a woman as beautiful as you are. I want to feel myself making love to YOU, not a piece of latex." and that's all it takes.. not another word about using a condom. I fuck them bareback and cum in them. The excitement of being fucked by a thick ten inch cock and then having me gush cum into them thrills them like they've never felt before. (that's how it's been described to me dozens of times)

MY HONEST AND BEST ADVICE....

TRUST BUT VERIFY... THAT MEANS PAY ATTENTION AND BE WATCHING. WHEN YOU SEE SOMETHING GOING DOWN, 'SHOW UP UNEXPECTEDLY' TO CHECK AND INTERRUPT IT. .... AND NEVER, EVER TRUST YOUR WOMAN TO BE ALONE WITH A MAN THAT SHE GETS ALONG WITH, WHO MIGHT BE AN APPEALING FUCK FOR HER BECAUSE, SOONER OR LATER, SHE WILL. IT'S HER NATURE. SHE MAY BE YOUR WOMAN BUT SHE'S ALSO A WHORE.

Practice Safe Internet Perversion!

Johnny had one thing right, she had to realize what was at risk and make the decision not to let sweet talker into her panties. In life everyone faces temptations and the decisions we make mold the rest of our lives. I am glad her daughter rattled her cage and made her wake up.

As for the person calling all females whores, what does it make you for constantly chasing another mans prize? Food for thought is it that all women arr easy or that you chase the easy ones.

Patricia was already having a affair, a emotional affair.

The dirty dancing...well would she do the in front of her husband? Cheating!

Johnny was going to let Patricia make her decisions without intervention to see if she would make the RIGHT decision.

If not for her daughter, Patricia would have been flat on her back under Mr. Slick.

The author undermines their own story by having the daughter provide an intervention.

This ruined any reconciliation since intervention was provided and Patricia reacted to that, not her morals, not her marriage vows, not her love for her husband, just because Brittany guilted her into backing out.

FAILED STORY Due To The Author Not Keeping True To His Own Story.

The Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com is not dangerous or a scheme

THAT PROFILE PROVIDES DETAILS OF A TRUE REAL LIFE SERIAL CHEATING WIFE! A COLLEGE INSTRUCTOR IN HELENA MONTANA WHO LOST THAT JOB BECAUSE INFO ON PROFILE WAS GIVEN TO COLLEGE ADMINISTRATION. THE INSTRUCTOR HAD COERCED STUDENT INTO AFFAIR THEM AIDED AND ABETTED THE DESTRUCTION OF HIS REPUTATION

Typical Crown Royal is a blended rye whisky, not a bourbon.

And foolish wife story Home town hero what bollocks.

Damn good story. Those who criticize should get a life. It's your story to tell as you wish. Critics...Piss Off!

Forget the damn bullshit others write this story is interesting, keeps your attention and has the best ending possible for a family that is only going thru a rough streak. Some critics can't seem to get it thru their heads that is fictional. It does not matter that it does not end in divorce. Keep up the great work.

I read a lot of your work. I find this story a cut above your already good work

Exceptionally good story. The Husband was a real man and the wife actually had sense and intelligence. Usually they don't have anything more than 2 braincells of they're lucky. This story is a breath of fresh air. Thank you.

Some time back, after first reading this wonderful tale, I emphatically clicked on 5 STARS!

Having bookmarked this exceptional work, I have often returned to be inspired over and over.

At the end of today's reading I noticed the five stars no longer lit bright yellow so compelled I was to light them up again!

Urge every re-reader to vote again if allowed. This exceptional submission deserves as close to 5 as we can make it!!!

Vote early

VOTE OFTEN!!!!!!!

...Richard Gerald must be furious!

Not the typical LW story. Great writing, great ending. Thanks

Spoken like a true Republican!

Seriously? Why take a dig on someone's political views? Since you opened the door, I will assume that you are a hypocritical Democrat.

As to the story, I don't think I would take her back. The only thing that stopped her was her daughter's reference to a divorce in a chance conversation. Her "love" for her husband certainly didn't stop her. I don't think you can trust her from then on. It was an emotional affair. I would always be wondering if she would fall for it the next time, especially if the daughter is not available by chance. Sure you can love a cheater, and forgive them, but that doesn't mean you should stay with them. Lack of trust will doom any marriage.

Actually I'm an independent. Only want what is best for the country and those who work to make it better everyday; not for the 1% who have stolen it away from us.

The comment made about union influence felt like an attack to me and I commented in kind. Get over it!

Now back to the story. It's damn fine story and deserves the praises it has received. Period.

You must be fairly young or you forget history

A much less educated extremely lowlife guy had his Teamsters shut down all freight transport for a week or two in the 60s.

Hate to inform you top machinists are pretty smart fellows.

Old joke about all lawyers and all garbage men go on strike. Which are you going to notice first?

You must not be politically savvy to not recognize the political power and influence of unions-especially in Democrat campaigns!

How most white collar elitists believe all blue collar workers are uneducated, ignorant morons. Years ago, a construction worker and govt official were having debate in a bar. Blue collar guy was winning when govt guy said if you are so smart why are you doing the job you are. WhenI was in college I did that work for a week. I quit because I knew I wasn't so IGNORANT I couldn't find other work. Construction worker just smiled. He began wearing baseball caps embroidered IGNORANT ONE-EYED HOD CARRIER.

Those who knew him were aware he had 145 IQ, was valedictorian in high school, president of National Honor Society, editor of literary magazine, Elks Most Valuable Student, scored 99 percentile on college entrance and NEDT exams, was extremely well read and exceptionally well spoken. He loved working with hands and had been promised a mason apprenticeship that never came to fruition.

He often remarked on how the elitists thought construction workers were morons but everyday went to work in 100 story buildings erected by those morons!

I've only tead one story by Jack that I felt was just average. It wasn't this one.

but the new weeds look for openings, TK U MLJ LV NV

Good story but a little short.... Johnny should have given a very special thank you to Brit, however, there is a passage that stated Johnny and Brit talked, so I wonder if she got clued in and was part of it all - to guilt her mom and giver her cold hard facts to ponder.

As Brittany was the real hero of this event!

Sorry but the seducer got off way to easy. He needs a serious baseball bat home-run to his balls. He will just going to another town and will wreck another marriage with a weaker hot wife. With Johnny's union connections he could keep tabs on the seducer and have it taken care of well away where no alibi would be needed. Make the seducer a painful eunuch.

He voted for the guy who said "I like to grab the pussies of women who I don't know because I'm rich and I can do it."

This was a excellent story of a true American hero. The little guy who makes up 90% of the American male population. They have to fight those rich buggers to prevent them from stealing their women when the rich guys flash their money.

A straight-up guy raher than a sociopath for once. Only problem I had was he just had to be the local union head, would have made a better story if he really was just a working class guy - and given he kmows the head of the firm anyway, he didn't need that extra.

Why weren't they using birth control though?

one of the best stories I've read on here

He handled his business without violence and with finality. Hate to think what would have happened to the snake if he.had tried to force himself on Patricia.

But he said he could forgive but never forget. He tells her to forget it but let's hope he never does. Because it was cheating! Time may temper emotional slights but stay vigilant! And a general question. Why is a girl's night out, without your spouse, with slow dancing involved, with other men, not considered a prelude to disaster on this or any site? I don't consider myself a Neanderthal but that is a "Oh, hell no!", but I'm not a cuckold either. Just curious

The only reason she stopped was because if the daughter. She did cheat emotionally if not doing the actual deed.

the truth of the kids put an end to the almost affair but it took to long for her to realize why she had.

William Broadacres needed to be dismantled, so he'd present no threat at his next assignment. The bloody man is a menace to other men's wives and needs to be taken down!! Good read. 5 *s.

Just because Patricia did not fall into bed with the asswipe Broadacres, didn't mean she hadn't cheated!! She discussed her dissatisfaction with her marriage and her wants and desires with another man. Total disrespect to a husband who broke his back to provide for his family. Had it not been for the succinct analysis of events by her daughter, she would have ended up fucking the slime ball and shitting on her marriage. Subsequent regret and remorse would have been of no consequence. Very well written plot.5*s.

This was one of Jack's best. He writes lot of pure garbage, but he knocked a few out of the park. This was one of the latter.