All Comments on 'Worth Risking It All - Shane & Fi'

That was well written and very hot!

He should have been bare back cumming deep inside her pussy

Yo, Hemingway. Chill out with the dense sentences. They come across as a word jumble, like you challenged yourself to jam as many fragments into one sentence as possible, and it doesn't work. Some of them are just fragments that don't even make sense or make complete sentences. They just run on and on. Wafted doesn't really work. Usually we think of odors as wafting - not trees. Focus more on getting the basics down so that readers aren't skipping through interminable sentences looking for the period.