by JimBob44
All past and future positive props for this story go double for me. I especially like the duality of mom's married boyfriend. He steps out on wife ( might have good reason ) but helps out the sidepiece son over and above the call of duty. Small touch but spicey.
Full marks * * * * *
Nice. Hard to track, but nice. Hope Rebecca forgives him when they get to college. And he seriously needs to set up the password on his computer.
Yeah, yeah, I get it - "Write It Down".
However, that continuous 'Inseption' nonsense in its third act almost turned a sweet coming-of-age story into an annoying turd. Thank for the finale goodbye, to bring it back into sweet.
I hope JimBob ain't going to discard those characters, and we'll have a follow-up for this story. I really like Todd and Becky, and hope again't hope they can somehow make it work... although, if there's a sequel, let's it solely through Rebecca's perspective - as I said, I like Todd... but man, were his fantasies starting to be annoying!
And hopefully, by then, the kid will learn to password-protect his laptop when he's not near it... dumb noob.
and like days...they too must end, TK U MLJ LV NV
i love your stories, though i would love to hear more about this one. did they get back together in college or is this the end of the romance for them? would love to see a part 2 to this.