All Comments on 'WSIM24B Ch. 07'

I have to say that somehow I missed the reference about time travel.

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I'm certainly glad that he got revenge for Nika by killing Anna, although somehow you managed to lose me on how they travel back to 1492. However I'm certainly willing to learn about the politics of the time.

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You engross us in the tale without bogging us down, and once more I find myself complimenting you on how you structure your words to match the pace of the fighting or the action. That's really is a unique talent.

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I can certainly see why the captain refused to tell them much about their assignment, but now it intrigues me further because how did the jump occur to the past anyway? I'm either going to have to go back and reread, or just look for more clues and future chapters. Either way, I'm loving the story, and the backstory that Pilgrim created for himself dot dot although how this is going to play out still has me scratching my head at this point. 5

this took an extremely unexpected turn, but the story just got a thousand times even more interesting. thank you.

I am all in with this story. Great writing. I can’t wait for the next chapter. Thanks

OK. I was enjoying this as it was. Then you smacked me with a left hook out of nowhere. Time Travel? That's some Assassin's Creed level shenanigans right there, and I AM HERE FOR IT! Keep it coming!

I was in Rome a year ago. Amazing place.

Wow! This story has taken off!

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Hope this is not a repost of an earlier comment, but I do not see it any more.

This story has taken off like a rocket!

Love the time travel!

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Well. There's quite a twist.

I love the story. One historic mistake. Pope Alexander, borga, started the building of the st Pieter, but didn't finish the church.

Engaging well told story.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Ha nice twist and twist. Looking forward to more.

Sooooo, we will -NOT- be returning to CWD144......................... uh huh.

You sir, are NO scholar! And CERTAINLY no Gentleman!!!

You have made an enemy for life!

Oh, and 5 Stars on this chapter. Obviously.

I mean, I hate you but this chapter was awesome.

Yay! Nothing better than 15th-Century political intrigue...well, except for 16th- or 17th-century. I mean, in just 35 years your going to have Holy Roman Emperor Charles V's troops brutally sack the Holy Roman capital because... whoops...things got a bit out of hand with that whole "I need to pay my army" thing. In any case, the Renaissance (or, as I like to think of it, the Very Early Modern period) is a great place to set a story. Love the little throw-away references like that 'Little Painter" working on the Sistene Chapel (some punk named Michelangelo will paint over his frescoes...the nerve).

Of course, Renaissance Rome is not what's where/when this is taking place. But, that said, I think I've figured out what the title means...

This is great fun. I'm almost ready to forgive you for killing Erika/Nika so suddenly. Almost.

Crap. Now I have to wait for the next chapter.

Oh wow. What a stunning and unexpected turn of events.

Sweet genre shift from SF to historical fiction. Interested to know where you're gonna take this!

Love it! Very exciting story, the twists are built up to in a logical way one can follow the clues back to their origin.

Holy cow that went sideways fast - 5 stars and bravo!

I think you're very brave to go diving into the real world of rennaisance politics and papal intrigue, I hope you've done your research :)

Hmmmm WSIM24B.

I'm beginning to wonder if our hero is actually in a simulation. Something is wrong with beta shard 24 of the historical world simulator?

We are in dire need of some more chapters!! A lot more! Another amazing story you're brewing there, thank you for your work.

“Holy shit!” indeed!

"Of course there were slaves. The trans-Atlantic slave trade was about to begin, once Columbus and his crew had finished sowing smallpox among the indigenous populations of the Americas."

Yes, a future event explains the presence of slaves better than, oh, the vile Barbary pirates or the Ottoman Turks who did the enslaving rather than part of the selling and buying.

But then again, that would preclude you from blaming white people, so it makes sense.

Oh well done with that twist!

5 stars

Awesome story. I’m really enjoying your history, too.

Of course you HAD to have a character with a Napoleonic simulation, with a pen name of AspernEssling!

Surprise twist! I love how you take your time getting there. And I’m actually reading this for plot. Great storytelling!

I'm gonna bust a gut if Ezio shows up.

As everyone knows, the big problem with time travel is the way it screws with the future. But, since we have already seen what the future is (see chapters 1-6), then what is going to happen in Rome is "predestined". The future can't be changed; what happens in Rome just is a record of what happened to make the future that Aspern has written about. Given that, no one would be mad enough to time-travel back on the grounds that changing the future might inadvertently wipe themselves out.

So time travel back to the past stories are problematic. Nevertheless, Aspern is a top writer and his stories remain interesting. I just have to suspend my disbelief as to the time travellers motives.

Wonderful story and unexcepted twist of action. However, I can see a weak point in the story - Torun de Peregrino, as good catholic Spaniard should attend a Mass every Sunday, but there is no mention of it, and he would completely ignorant to the proper ceremony and his duties as a churchgoer.

This is getting even funner. Carry on!

@tenyari

When I looked up WSIM, it indeed said as an IBM acronym "Workload Simulator," and you may be right. After I looked it up (actually after ch 2), I wondered if we would have any "tells" that he was somehow hooked up to a neural interface.

Still enjoying the series even if this chapter had no sex! Good job on your research

Oh shit...yep I agree. Carry on.

A) Thank You AspernEssling for confirming that estonians do excist in future as nation. Being on of the people of that small nation - it is always a lovely suprise to see Estonia mentioned somewhere. B) I would clear up or offer possible reason why Torun is might not be so religois as one of the comments suggested ( Torun de Peregrino, as good catholic Spaniard should attend a Mass every Sunday). His mother is from Estonia - country what is being know for being one of the least religious/most atheist countries in world so it could be her influence for him to lack any interest in religion so far in this story.

While we await Ch 8, I will share this Spanish gem with other commenters: "Peregrino" aside from "pilgrim" means traveler, or "one that passes through strange lands (translated from the General Dictionary of the Spanish Language)," which fits him, also being time-displaced.

Hey Comentarista82 - good catch on the name. There is still a word in English: peregrinations. Thank you, too, for your detailed comments. I'm awed by the time and thought you put into them. At this stage, there must be some who think that we are one and the same person (or at least closely related). And no - Comentarista82 is not on my payroll.

Hats off to Swebo and Tenyari, too - they were the first to look closer at the title of the series, and make some pretty shrewd guesses as to what it means.

Thanks to everybody for your comments; your support is the reason why I still post on this site.

AE

Loved where this went-did not see it coming and that is always a lovely surprise! Thank you for this wonderful gift.