by Imorol
If you're going to do fan-fiction about a US TV series, don't fill it with british slang start to finish, pretty much destroys whatever you were trying to achieve. Might as well have just picked random names, with no celebrity tie-in at all, and made it about a hound of the Baskervilles or something instead, to put in a British locale, with characters more interested in buggery than pussy.
In Hood River, Oregon, your description SHOULD say, "Dana Sculey gets horny WHILE hunting Bigfoot. That one word, whilst, gets you 1* because I can't give you a zero.