All Comments on 'Xolt 2 Ch. 07'

I really like your story, except now I'm so worried for Jing and for his daughter... also, if he dies, his twins will be orphans (sadface). Sometimes it's good to remember this is only a story. As you left us with two cliffhangers (what's Brandon thinking now?) so I hope you'll post again soon, but whenever you do I'll be reading and be thankful.

A very minor point: it would be great if you got an editor to fix the typos. I'm sure for native English speakers they're irrelevant, but even a simple thing like you're/your makes for very slow reading for me.

I was reading this and knew I had read it before. The last chapter 6 that you posted, was the same. I hope you put out a NEW chapter soon....as I really want to know what happens to Jing and Brandon

Thanks for the new chapter - hoping for a HEA for everyone here. Have been keeping an eye out for a story update that doesn't fall into the "slut/psychopathic personality" category we've been getting so much of lately - I like a story where the characters are "nice people" (or nice aliens, as the case may be).

I agree with the reader commenting on the you're/your issue - even for a native English speaker, it's a problem. "You're" = "you are" and "your" indicates when something "belongs" to the "you" in question. This is a basic error made in a lot of writing on this site, and I can only assume that the American education system doesn't concern itself too much with grammar or punctuation. That's a real pity - it means that even educated Americans come across as uneducated to the rest of the English-speaking world. Read "Eats, shoots and leaves" by Lynne Truss - it's about how to punctuate correctly, and it's a fun read.

The beginning of this chapter was a re-post of the end of the last chapter, but no big deal. The rest was fine and advanced the plot. I hope the next won't take as long. With two mates pregnant and a third maybe, I can't wait to find out.

I think Zhi is wrong I think Brandon was overwhelmed by the emotions but his reaction probably caused the same negativity in Brandon as it did in Zhi. Looking forward to the next chapter