All Comments on 'Young, Gifted And Wrapped!'

Nice Birthday present what more you ask for?

Enjoyed your scenario, and the writing was good for your first submission. It would have been more visual if "Josie" had given more of a description of herself - hair color/length, eyes, lips, shape, height, etc. Consider using one of the volunteer editors for your next submission. Keep writing, you've got potential.

Really good first submission!

I hope to read more, soon.

Has many of the usual sex cliches, but very readable as the narrative flows along quite well.

very good for 1st time in style and descrition of 1st time 40 something mature

would have expected a bit more of a rush and bit clumsiness to characters to build interest

I really enjoyed this! It is well written, inteesting, and the passion results in vivid hot sex!

love the story young gifted and wrapped.

you should write the next part this one was excellent story and writing .

I could not not stop creaming, 16 hours of non stop hot fucking. wow The best I was ever able to get was 10

just loved it and know just how it feels to be with an older woman - the longest I ever fucked one 44 year old divorcee was 6 hours then we slept and started all over again in the morning - every young man should experience being with an older woman as they never run and tell, they just cum back for more and more and more. The best sex you will ever experience.

Great story, you should write more. Don't be shy!