by cnhemingway
Just wish you'd put a divider when switching between characters>_< (symbol etc.)
Minor errors don't worry me, even the transition problems don't bother me. I am loving this story and the direction it is going. I want Stepen and Christina happy, and whole together. Deacon , Jackson and Mr. Basin better watch out!
5 stars!
I am absolutely knee deep in this story.... Each chapter gets better and better... Keep up the greay writing.
IndianChocolate
I didn't notice until you guys brought it to my attention! When I did a final read through before submitting it I didn't even see it then. His name is Deacon, I have no idea how my brain jumped to Declan, but I apologize greatly for it. As for the scene transitions, I separate each scene with asterisks but they don't seem to show up when published. I will try to figure that out, I know it helps to have clear defined scene transitions when reading.
Again I am so sorry for the flaw in continuity and I will make sure it doesn't happen again!
Deacon ???? Declan ???
Did I miss something?
Watch for continuity.
{Personal Note: Education First, Needing to work (even two jobs) a necessary second, Slowing down to continue to write a beautiful story, a thirdly passion}
Five Stars on where this story is going.
I knew Jackson was up to no good. But I thought it was no more than some cheating.
There is some confusion with whom Deacon and Declan is. Was there a typo with the names?
The transition from one scene to the next don't flow that well. It was pretty much that way through the whole chapter.