by TotalGeekShow
Kind of bland, hope it is going somewhere. Shouldn't the slapping be grabbing over a knee and spanking?
not enough here to get interested. no need to continue. (still better than anything from Pink Purple though)
You jumped too fast into everything, but I understand what you were trying to do with the story. Personally, I like a lot more details to build an image in my mind of the situation unfolding. Not very realistic in this format, but it could make a good story.