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All Comments on 'Zach's Nieces Ch. 02: They Go Shopping'

by ZachDocEight

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Apoc04Apoc04about 6 years ago
Great story

Please continue it is a great story I really enjoy reading it

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Grammar check, please.

You need to know the rules about using quotes. Page 1 at the beach shop you included 'and could she help us' in the quotes. A proper quote would have been 'and could you please help us?' You were still addressing the saleslady. You did it again in her reply. I stopped at that point to write this review. I am now going back to finish this intriguing tale.

You have been writing long enough to expect a better product from yourself. Please try to improve with each new offering. You can do it!

Great story so far. Looking forward to more.

Milo_Talon (yes, I am registered!)

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Best to read my stories by Date. Some of my early work is Not the best, learned as I went along. Re: 'Zach Ch: 8 Part Series' stories were re-numbered by the ADMIN. The 'Widow' is a series and 'Powers' is the other. One 3 part story, "Zach Ch. 01-03 The Widow Farmer" got m...