All Comments on 'Zack and Zoey'

very nice very hot - will it continue ?

It was hot. Keep it coming.

.. there was an unreality, even for fantasy.

Stan

I really enjoyed the slow build-up, but then BAM! they fuck end of story. If you do a re-write, try having her lose again, and he "wins" fingering her, then she loses and he gets to eat her, then she wins to get him naked. Slow sex is good sex, but a quickie is just a fuck.

Story was great. I can think of times I had similar thoughts.

Hope you have some more stories of Zack & Zoey!!

that was good story put some more Zack and Zoey story

ch. 02 thanks cfh

It seemed real to me and to me that's what counts.

9 1/2 inch cocks and non stop screwing are not real life. Personally I'm turned on by stories that seem like they could actually happen.

I have a twin brother and we have been fucking since high school. We are 25. He is in Iraq and im in NYC. I want him so badly.

This story had all the indications of the start of a great series. You must continue.......

I enjoyed the slow build-up leading to the 'sudden death' conclusion which, I suspect, is what happens to most of us in 'first encounters'. Action, in the next encounter, should be more exploratory and loving!

Looking forward to more adventures of Zack & Zoe,

Pete.

it was good, like everyone's saying... the slow build up was well done, but then all of a sudden it's over, kind of like you got tired of writing.

it would make the story much better if you kept it going a little, included a little more sex before he inserted himself inside of her.

Otherwise, it was well done, good story.

I loved your story. It was so real with the slow build up. I wish that I could give you more than a 5. I also wish that I had a sister so I could have fun with her.

The dialog was unnatural, and the climax was way too short, there was no denouement. But there was really good build-up and a nice back-story. Keep writing, maybe try an editor.

i fucked my sister for 3 years so i can comment on this story it was very hot

I play backgammon with my sister all the time, but only wish something like this could happen! Seriously hot. I'm rock hard and have already cum!

my brother and I started when he was 12 i was 13 wonderful, we now share his wife. thanx for wrighting this. louann

This was a great story. I had flash backs. My sister is 4 years older then me, and when she was 15 and I was 11 we started playing around. we played around for 3 years

Wow, that was great! I wished when I started fucking my little sister we'd been playing a game like that. Ah well, that's something to try when our girlfriends are away! thanks for the hot story.

Wow, that was great! I wished when I started fucking my little sister we'd been playing a game like that. Ah well, that's something to try when our girlfriends are away! thanks for the hot story.

i wish you had finished the story you left so much unsaid like does she get pregnant do they continue do the parents find out if so what happens do they move in with each other if you had finished it would have got a 100 but you e=were to lazy so you get a 50 instead

i been fucking my sis for over 10 years she married we tell all we going to bathroom to talk we fuck like hell

what is going on here are you serious what you guys that desperate you cant get a girl so ul just do your sister what a bunch of red necks man up grow some balls and go get a girl from the club or off the street or do i have to show you how its done cause i dont think you know how aye bloody fags

hot like hell! i came hard and long thinking my sweet sister!

Great job buddy!keep it up

Good plot to the story mate, descriptive in parts and quickfire just at the right time. The length of the story is a little too short for my liking but that is me really splitting hairs.

to the moron that said this

"what is going on here are you serious what you guys that desperate you cant get a girl so ul just do your sister what a bunch of red necks man up grow some balls and go get a girl from the club or off the street or do i have to show you how its done cause i dont think you know how aye bloody fags"

Its a story lad, that thing that you were supposed to have been taught to do at school.. judging by your ill choice of words and lack of punctuation, you skipped that part. It doesn't really matter what the story is about and the fact that this particular one is fiction, I'm also guessing your one of those sad types who can't fathom the difference between real life and stories.

Also, you too read this story thus your just as muich of a "redneck" and "bloody fag" (your words) because it seems you masturbated over the concept of having sex with your sister.

Listen to your mother and take note. "IF you have nothing nice to say. shut the hell up"

Just awful!

good writing, the finish was too quick though

i really enjoyed the story though i felt that the end kinda rushed up on me.

Yeah, the ending was rather rushed, but the rest was entertaining.

very good but u deffinetly need to write more

really nice story please add more

Reminds me of what happened betweens my sister and I. Only there was no alcohol involved. She just gave the best blowjob my cock ever felt. Anyway, back to the story. It was awesome. Ending lacked

BUT, ALL IN ALL IT WAS NOT BAD.

ALSO STRIP POKER IS FASTER.

..THANKS..