All Comments on 'Zell'

The promising start of what could evolve into something deeper if that's your intention. If not, no problem, it can stand as is. Here it's more about sex, less about feelings, although the characters' genuine affection for one another comes through.

Very good... ; we're almost talking erotic literature here instead of boiler-plate rubbish. Hope to hear more from you, but take your time .

Excellent heart. A first draft of a remarkable story. The story-telling is a bit sparse, and the writing a little bit disjointed. I hope you will redraft, expanding it a bit in depth and continuing the storyline to a HEA conclusion. Thanks for posting.