All Comments on 'Zoe Pt. 01: Zoe Loves Ryan'

Totally lacking any credibility whatsoever starting in the first paragraph and continuing throughout the story.

Were you having trouble sleeping, and decided to write this? It really is weak. Not good in style or content. Don't stop trying...Just put more effort into it.

Lets see another chapter of the story.

Its good that Zoe discovered his videos and porn stash and got so hot she had to fuck her brother. Now, they have many ways they can go further and hope you write more chapters very soon. She I am sure has many ways she can get him off and they can try anything. Thanks...

Maybe you're story wasn't great literature but I thing the cowardly attacks by the two 'Anonymous' readers were out of line. There were few spelling or grammar mistakes and I read it through without stopping, something I can't say about some others. If you like writing then keep at it.

Shocking writing, appalling dialogue, weak story.

Fail.

Please part 2