- Erotic Poetry
- stormy night
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Click hereLightning strikes
Loud crashes as the air is rent, penetrated
Flashes and glimpses of tanned tawny flesh
Smooth as polished marble yet supple,
Trace the line of your calf from your feet
To the ticklish place behind your knee
Relish your naked form
Each strike silhouettes
Scenes of delicious decadence
Your cries our thunder
bodies twitching our lightning
we lasted longer than the storm
- COMMENTS
HarryHillalmost 11 years agoI think the term 12 used was casement or framing
I liked it Tod for the simple reason that you are moving to distill your thoughts. Read up on minimalism if you have time
todski28almost 11 years agoAuthorwith the final line being omitted? I feel that it would read much better as you suggested. I wasn't looking for cute at all Angeline.
Desejo, I like your addition it seems to give it finality or box in. As to the violence how do you know there was no bdsm happening in that room lol ;)
Thanks for your time to comment.
Desejoalmost 11 years agoReally nice - and no violence! (inside joke)
I agree with Antagie about the final line. Consider completing the circle with just one final word: strikes. I think 1201 calls it a box, or something like that. For the title, how about Flash? Regardless a solid 5. Bravo.
twelveoonealmost 11 years agoget in do what you have to do and get out, ignore, you've already done that
ticklish/Relish -good one
Each strike silhouettes - good
5ed
