All Comments on 'New Beginnings'

From the start of this story I was expecting Jess to befriend Rachel, for them to become friends and to then become lovers. They way it reads Jess has manipulated Rachel into a position to get her into bed. So they have gone from meeting to bed in a few hours. You have made Rachel someone in need. Unfortunately you have made Jess a user. A woman who has adopted a child has to have a good heart, so Jess needs a better image. It might have worked better if they had spent time getting to know each other and to fall in love. Maybe I am too romantic!!!

Loved the idea, good sex scene, but way too fast.

I enjoyed the story very much but found things developed too quickly. On the other hand, it was the right moment for both Jessica and Rachel. Also it seems an obvious relationship which could be developed.

Johanna

It's amazing to me that such great potential can be reduced to just a fuck. No build up, no romance no love. Could have been so much of a great story.....

new acquaintances , while desperately but not really understanding her need, the young blond responded from that beautiful need to her lovers needs and they responded with lust then love. It was absolutely passionate and wonderful ! Thank you from a very appreciative old man.

too fast for the sex,duh.the creepy guy at the park was a problem that never came to be.last but not least was she married to the drunk or not because you said so but kept calling him her boyfriend and why did they not go back to her hometown

Do you think it would be like this in real life ? I liked some of the story though and you write well. It was just too unrealistic.

The pace of this story might have been a little quick, but I disagree that it was too fast. Jessica knew what Rachel needed, and just followed her instincts. Can't wait for the next chapter of this incredible story!

I like the story. There is so much potential with this couple.

You did a very good job writing this very sensual story. Good build up and nice flow into the sex. Liked your description of events and the passion between the two.

I agree that this story has great potential for more chapters. More heavy passion with Rachel really getting into the lesbian sex by showing hot steamy love for Jessica by going to her knees and really loving her sex.

Add more chapters, please......

I agree with most everyone else, the story had great beginnings, but no middle and a quick race to the finish. I think you should take some suggestions and tweak it to include building of a friendship

Hello My name is Frank Hogan

This story reminds me of another Favorite Fic of mine. "Second Generation" By Little Spit, In This Case the kids are 2 boys instead of 2 girls but anyone else who ALSO knows Second Generation WILL see similarities.

So I ALSO add my plea for more to this

I loved it, I hope there's more to come!

L

This was a beautiful story of two people finding each other. New beginnings is a good title for this short story. I have enjoyed reading stories about lesbians, but have always been partial older women and younger women. I don't think that a follow up chapter is necessary.

The length was perfect. Don't need 7 pages to build friendship into love. What happens every time is the sex is 1/2 a page long. What I'd like here is Chap 2; since you didn't finish it properly.

Jessica is one lusty woman who needs more. She lifts Rachel up. Rachel senses that they aren't finished. Jess kisses Rachel, then spins her around. Rachel knows and gets onto her hands and knees, raising her ass as high as she can. Jess tell her that they need to fuck. Now you use your talents. Take over, Rewrite and let them finish the way they should. The older leading the younger. Then afterward Rachel eats Jessica in whatever way you choose. Anal? This could go on...join your readers in masturbation.

very well written and most enjoyable

Loved the story!! You could feel the love between Rachel and Jessica as they discovered each other. Keep the story going, need to find out what happens next as their relationship grows

Hoping you will write another chapter of New Beginning.

5🌟's

s didn't like it much.

Beautiful story

I would agree with the comments except the last paragraph on pg. 1 gives me doubts. " cursed herself for feeling happy about her guest's nervousness "

May only be one story but it's very good

Wow! Often these stories bring back memories of similar experiences. I don’t get the petty criticism. I read it and was very, very, excited by the story. I was fresh out of high school and had only had one experimental experience with another girl. However, my first enlightening experience was with an older woman that truly awakened my sexuality. My Jessica was a 30 year-old professional woman (Shirley), visiting Southern California from England. I was 18 years-old and hanging out at the beach, when not working in the summer. I met her near the condo she had rented and I’d have to say she swept me off my feet and out of my bikini. I had never been so obviously hit on by a woman. I must say though I was accustomed to attention as my body had developed at an early age. Shirley was 5’ 9” tall, with short blonde hair and had a model-like body. I was 5’ 4” tall, with shoulder-length wavy brown hair, 34D breasts (that she admired) and a well-tanned olive complexion. I, like Rachel, was more than willing to let Shirley “show me the way.” However, I didn’t require as much persuasion and was never one to hold back when enjoying a new experience. I spent almost a whole first weekend in bed with Shirley, except for swimming and eating breaks. She enjoyed my youthful enthusiasm and “craving” and I was rewarded with more body-shaking orgasms than I’d ever felt or imagined possible. I wanted to give of myself to every experience Shirley desired. I was rewarded ten-fold. I loved her giving me oral, scissoring, and must confess the strap-on experience drove me wild with lust. 😀 Susan in San Diego, CA

A truly beautiful story. What a pity that bijou stopped writing. Very talented.

Vice is not the word you are looking for VISE is

This is a GREAT story. I am sorry that her husband blew out his knee in football.