All Comments on 'Jillian's Magic'

This mongrol couple are a pair of dogs that deserve to be shot as for the guy cutting of his balls would be awesome. As for your daughter naming her Ali is just another insult to the woman who didn't deserve to be treated this way. How about calling your daughter SLUT

Here are two people who were made for each other. Jillian's husband seems like a nice guy but has never moved beyond high school and football, reliving his past. Ali sounds like the all American bitch. Nothing matters but what she wants. Don't cum in me you asshole is not a term of endearment. I don't want to start a family for at least 5 years if then. The wedding has to be just perfect and you better want that also and hang on my every word.

These two clicked, had the same interests in many things besides great sex. They did not name their child "Ali".

Great job, it works for me.

how about including some hot sweaty breast milk dripping pregnant sex?

Sexy Hot but sad that it was done in such a caulus way with no thought for the others. Kind of cowardly

The story may be okay. All four are low class and low IQ, and I don't identify with such people. Therefore, the story did not do much for me. It certainly wasn't erotic. Not in the least.

Personally, I didn't care all that much for the outcome or the motivations. However, the story is very well written, it contains a lot of erotic elements that are definitely appealing as well.

Mediocre writing and savagely bad plot.

This is one of my favourites. Good writing, interesting story, fabulous characters.

Read the story properly before critising.

As for being a pair of dogs. What they did was better than leading the other two on their whole lives.

I should at least like one of the characters, but in this story I didn't. Everyone is quite despicable, especially our couple of cheaters.

Awh, don't know here..To much lies and a no backbone to be seen anywhere.. But the penmanship wasn't that bad, only the ideas about how people should be. So 25 for penmanship and null for the rest..

Told from the view of the betrayers. It's hard to care about silly amoral dirt-bags or about anything that happens to them. The two sluts deserve each other and expect if their story were told honestly they would be miserable.

Nothing magical about this piece of sh1t. Only lies, betrayal, humiliation. They ran away like cowards because they were cowards. He was always jealous of Chris and he decided that Chris sloppy seconds were good enough for him. And he did get sloppy seconds. He was too consumed being second best to realise it. And he was second best!

Just shit!

The following was over the top and 180 degrees from how Chris was described. Therefore, it could never happen.

"I heard Chris had some sort of nervous breakdown and had to be committed."

Continueing his quest for top spot on the commentors list. Making sure everyone sees the rating he gives as if anyone cares what this boob thinks.

I never did; the wife is the usual culprit but in this case, the guy is a real dickhead.

Ali never deserved this.

Inconsiderate cheating heartbreakers. He should've at the very least called off the wedding. The story was well written but the characters were despicable.

he was a fucking piece of god damn garbage and maybe the character will have his cock cut of in the next installment.

Always getting his "buds" seconds.

In the crunch his "bud" can't perform.

He absconds with "buds" seconds again.

Wow!

from the beginning. Characters were not likeable. Tags sucked - not that I'd ever want to find this story again.

And karma is coming his way, what a couple of assholes.

Two cheaters hooking up, hope dumb fuck doesn't try crying in Chris's ear when Jillian gets knocked up with her next lovers baby. Happy life cheating on each other.

Once a cheater always a cheater.

there is a lot of sneaky betrayal. TK U MLJ LV NV

At least they didn't continue the deception.

Writing wasn't terrible but the characters were.

What revenge was do against Chris?

Ali certainly didn't deserve to be shit on like that.

If they fell in love, Jillian should have divorced amicably and Ali should have been broken off with gently before they ran off into the sunset.

So what was the point?

No enjoyment past the ok writing style.

Evil weevils.. Not worth the story you wrote.

Disgusting pair.

In fact this piece just totally disrespects the letters of the alphabet.

...is a real dick. Jillian is just a whore who will cheat again. For him to do this to his best friend, chris and fiance Ali, who were nothing but good to him makes him a grade A piece of shit. Hopefully karma strikes this loser down someday. 1 star.

Loklie

Wonderful romance except for a couple of little details. Namely Chris and Ali.

I guess the redeeming part of this story is that normally we get the story from the perspective of Chris or Ali.

Nope. He was just a victim to two much bigger a-holes and a bride I would not even date on a dare. Not a single character I'd want to know.

Fucking assholes

Fucking assholes is a very appropriate comment.

California is the perfect place for these cheating assholes to end up. Two more pieces of shit won’t even be noticed there.

Pathetic

Shitty story about two immoral people.

Ick.

Wow one hell of a man. Glad he wasn’t a friend of mine